Reply Tue 27 May, 2003 05:44 am
This is very strange. I posted this response on the thread
"Where's your next home improvement project going to be?"
I was just being factual.

Then I read it again, and maybe it belongs in this forum. Confused
Does it make sense to you on both levels?


I just want to put everything away.
Just have a place for it all. That's all.

So I'm building an attic! It's only 19 inches tall,
but it's a good space, a fine attic, where no one can see.
It will fit 54 boxes with a system of sliders and ropes.

Then I'll be done, I'll be ready and set.
I'll be able to face life with a clean and comfy place.
Without tripping on things.

Please don't tell my landlord that I'm inside the ceiling.
The dust I'm finding is from 1904, almost a hundred years old.
The wiring is rotten and the bricks are crumbly up there,
and it's hard to hammer behind my shoulder with a headlamp on.

But he'll probably never know. Come to think of it,
I haven't seen him around since ... a distant recollection
of whiskey lost in time. Memories belong in the past.

Or at least in 54 boxes.
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Reply Tue 27 May, 2003 10:07 am
I thought the same thing when I read it!! Almost suggested it! The line breaks and flow make it quite lyrical.
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Reply Tue 27 May, 2003 10:11 am
I would love to build an attic....problem is the apartment above me.
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Reply Wed 28 May, 2003 02:03 pm
codeborg, I think it belongs here because it is written in poetic form. Many poems are written about ordinary things. One that I really loved was entitled "Manhole Covers"..

I like your poem, incidentally.
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