Help me make this song into something amazing

I like it the way it is! I think it'd make a good song! What kind of genre did you have in mind? There are just a few minor things like spelling, but other than that I think you did a swell job!

I was in love with the unlovable

She's in love with another guy
The guy of her dreams
her very first kind (and/or)~here I thought I was Mister Right

Nothing could break them apart
this **** was breaking my heart

Yes, baby it true
I was always thinking of you
How can I get back in your life
it didn't matter how much I tried
I couldn't get in there
Yes baby it's true

I was in love with the unlovable
I was in love with the unlovable
I was in love with the unlovable

I always had to see the sight
It made me cry tears in the night

Just wondering
How did we go so fast
You told me so many things
We share a past

I didn't want believe
Now I have to sit here
Act like its nothing
Girl I'm not fronting
I thought what we shared was true
Yes, baby it's true


I was in love with the unlovable
I was in love with the unlovable
I was in love with the unlovable

Sometimes I wish I was the one In front of you
Kissing you goodbye
I remember the good times
Where you would count on me,
When things between us felt so right

That's why it was to much for me to bare
Seeing you in front of me with those pretty eyes
Seeing everything that I loved but couldn't touch
couldn't love you the way I wanted
I had to stand back and say good-bye
Yes, baby it's true

I was in love with the unlovable
I was in love with the unlovable
I was in love with the unlovable





I like it...I tweeked with the spelling...lol, and added a line or word. But its good.

thank
thanks for the the reply. I trying to make it a love song

makemeshiver33 thanks for ur comments i like the way you fixed it and it sound a little better but i think we can make it even better so with your tips and a little more from me, i made it like this. but i can't put my hand on it it sound finish but it feels like it needs some good wording in some places.

She's in love with another guy
The guy of her dreams
her very first kind
here I thought I was Mister Right

Nothing could break them apart
this **** was breaking my heart

Yes, baby it true
I was always thinking
How can I get back in her life
it didn't matter how much I tried
I couldn't get in there
Yes baby it's true

I was in love with the unlovable
I was in love with the unlovable
I was in love with the unlovable

I always had to see the sight
It made me cry tears in the night

Just wondering
How did we go so fast
You told me so many things
I thought we was gotten last

I didn't want believe
what just happen
Now I have to sit here
Act like its nothing
Girl I'm not fronting
I thought what we shared was true
Yes, baby it's true


I was in love with the unlovable
I was in love with the unlovable
I was in love with the unlovable

Sometimes I wish I was the one In front of you
Kissing you goodbye
I remember the good times
Where you would count on me,
When you were feeling so out of life

Girl,You and me felt so right
I thought you were my other side

That's why it was to much for me to bear
Seeing you in front of me with those pretty eyes
Seeing everything that I loved but couldn't touch
couldn't love you the way I wanted
I had to stand back and say good-bye
Yes, baby it's true

I was in love with the unlovable
I was in love with the unlovable
I was in love with the unlovable

good song, speaks out to me i think they were right, sounds fine the way it is.

so what is it like pop, pop-rock sort of thing.