bones

Winter - I found your poem very comforting. It's comforting to me to think of death as a kind of rest or respite after a life well-lived, and that is what I hear hinted at in these lines: "Death will not hurt you as the living will do." Also comforting is the thought that one might not have to go to the grave alone, but will be joining someone to take that rest or continue the journey (whichever you believe happens) together.

I also liked the way the words and rhythm provide a flowing, almost lyrical undertone. The only changes I would make would be in the following lines:

But alas time Passed quickly
And her beauty did fade.

(I think you just made a typo writing pass instead of passed - but I think the second line flows better without the soon).

I also don't know about the first line of the last stanza. The poem up to that point seemed to be written in a fairly formal format and voice which then suddenly changes to a more informal and casual tone with the line: "And don't think you can cheat it". You then switch back to your more formal language for the remainder of the stanza. This is confusing and throws the reader off. Maybe something like,

"Death will not be cheated (with the stress or accent on not)
For the game must be played
All shall be( join) with me
In my home called the grave."

I like join in the third line instead of be because it infers an eventual meeting which builds upon the theme you introduced in the first verse of some sort of fellowship or communion of souls that continues beyond the grave.
You did use join in the first stanza - so you may want to find another one syllable word that implies the same thing, so that you aren't repetitive. I can't think of one off the top of my head- but I'm sure if you used a thesaurus, you could find one.

I really like your poem. It starts out so quietly and peacefully, almost lulling one into a sense of beauty and safety and then progresses in a completely unexpected and more sinister (if one is afraid of death) direction. Even if one isn't afraid of death - that sinister undertone is there and detectable and adds interest.

Final thought - just an aside. If you put your screen name and the name of your poem together you'd have "Winter Bones". I think this would provide another layer of interest to your title. At the same time, Bones is also very simple and self-explanatory and works as an interesting juxtaposition- bones are not what one usually thinks of when picturing a beautiful young woman.