Sonnet....

I'll help. I'm pretty good at sonnets--I'm assuming English, not French?

some of the lines
im only posting some of the lines that have serious iambic pentameter issues...

Such a strong love like Paris and Helen
Love that can flow, like the ink from a pen.
Like protection from rain, just like a tent;
This boy always has and will always be,
My guide, my hope, like the great angel sent
From God, from heaven, to take care of me.
I hope he will think, not ever forget
He hath been Romeo, I, Juliet.

THank you soooooooooo much!!!

I'll see what I can come up with--I'll be back. I don't think it's all that bad, in the first place, on initially reading it. But the TV's on, so I can't tell for sure.

A love this strong, like Paris and Helen
Such love can flow, as ink flows from a pen
Always this boy has, and e'er will he be
My guide, my hope, an angel heaven-sent
From God, up above, to take care of me.
I pray he takes care to never forget
He hath been Romeo; I, Juliet.

Since you used 'hath' in the last line, I used 'e'er' in the third line in order to conserve syllables.

What do you think?

oops!

somehow I left out the line about the rain.

A love this strong, like Paris and Helen
Such love can flow, as ink flows from a pen
A shelter from rain, a haven, a tent;
Always this boy has, and e'er will he be
My guide, my hope, an angel heaven-sent
From God, up above, to take care of me.
I pray he takes care to never forget
He hath been Romeo; I, Juliet.

Maybe?

thank you soooooo much!

hey how do i delete my posts...because i can't get plaguerism in this class... and my teacher would consider this plaguerism

How can it be plagarism if I consented? Can you not get help from a 'tutor' or something?

BUT I understand where you are coming from...

--look at the bottom, below the last post--on the right. It should say 'turn off (or on) email updates'
then 'view next topic' etc
It says you can delete your posts in this forum.

If it doesn't work, then maybe just edit your posts to something else. If you do that, I will, too.

Thanks for letting me help you. I hope you get a good grade in your class!