Countless Thoughts

FEEL FREE......
HEY, EVERYONE and ANYONE feel free to reply to ALL of my POEMS that YOU READ. CRITICISM is EXPECTED! whether the poem is too sappy, dark, no rhythm, or is just plain weird (like me), still reply. i posted it here for a reason. dont be too scared to tell me what you think. im asking for yalls opinion, so ill have to respect it. even if you just down right hate it.. TELL ME! thanks for your response!

Great poem, just one tip, and you don't exactly have to use it. If you wanted to make the poem sound a little smother, you could have the last word of each stanza rhyme, in series of twos.
Example:

--------------------------,
-------------------------,
----------------------------- be.

----------------------------,
------------------------,
------------------------------ see.

------------------------,
-----------------------------------,
----------------------- time.

--------------,
-----------------------------,
-------------------- lime.

I know its a crude example, but I think you get to idea.

P.S: As for the critism comment, I too would love to have everyone critisize my work. I love advice, but sometimes its better to be patient, and eventually you will have some good words come in about your piece.

By the way, is your signiture latin?

thanks....nice tip
i actually have several poems that are in that stanza. i lost or hopefully "misplaced temporairly" my poems book of three years. its been missing for about a month now. but i have patitents that it will turn up. and yes, my quote is latin. would you like to know what it means?

p.s. since you read my work its only fair that i read yours.