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Going Down In Flames

 
 
Reply Thu 12 Jan, 2006 06:30 pm
this started out as a break up song, but kinda decided to take a little bit of a different road after i started...ne how, its a little darker than wat my songs have been lately, but i hope u all like it just the same. all comments welcome.

Going Down In Flames

VERSE
I knew it from the beginning.
You and me, we were meant to be.
But right now all my thoughts are spinning,
?'Cause tonight's the night I'll drop to one knee.

CHORUS
And I've always wondered,
Just how you could fake your beautiful smile.
Holding you closer each night, my lover you became.
So let me make this night worth your while,
As I watch us going down in flames.

VERSE
I could barely sleep at all last night.
Was too busy thinking ?'bout what life's put you through.
?'Cause it's filling me with spite
For the world and what its done to you.

CHORUS

BRIDGE
I got to your house on time,
Only to see it set ablaze.
Ran into your house and began to climb.
Spent a few minutes in a daze,
As I look down upon your lifeless body.
Then the tears began to fall....

CHORUS


VERSE 3
All I can do now,
Is lie helplessly by your side.
My life to you, I vow it so.
And when the flames had all died
Two bodies were found in a warm embrace.
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CrazyDiamond
 
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Reply Thu 12 Jan, 2006 09:57 pm
I've got no critique. I think this is your best yet RG7. The words fit together and there aren't any forced rhymes that I can see. Also, the anticipation in the beginning and the pain in the end both come through very well.
Great write. Very Happy

I can hear it playing now...sounds good.
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rockguitarist7
 
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Reply Fri 13 Jan, 2006 06:05 am
^thanx. i like those parts about it, but im gonna have to make changes to how i word everything, so sum lines will b shorter...
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