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Turn My Back.

 
 
Reply Sun 8 Jan, 2006 08:34 pm
The situation you imposed upon me
was not fathomable in my mind.
We were not broke, we were not lacking,
we were not imbalanced. I thought our places
were known in the scheme of things.

And maybe I shouldn't have ignored the facts.
And maybe I could have told you how I felt.
Maybe I didn't have to turn my back.
But I did. And I feel good now.
I feel good now.

The pressure you put upon me
pushed me further out the door.
Everytime you called, you always wanted more.
My rejections were powerless as you always
had unlimited suggestions. My feelings were not there.
They were not mutual, they were not one.

Maybe I didn't have to turn my back,
but I did, and I feel good now.
I feel good now.
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Reply Sun 8 Jan, 2006 09:25 pm
That poem had the passion and sincerity I love to see. Also, I liked the use of repetition. Good poem, nice work.
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Reply Sun 8 Jan, 2006 09:35 pm
Thanks C.D! I'm glad you stopped by and posted. Is that you in your avatar?
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