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Sun 1 Jan, 2006 12:01 am
This lyric came to me more naturally than ne other. Everything in it (metaphores, rhymes, watever) came to me exactly as it is, ive done little to no editting at all since it came to me. So theres probably a lot to critique. so enjoy. Rip it apart. Music is at a normal speed til the end
The Story's Ending
Verse 1
It started out great
We both thought it was fate
So we started to be
More than friends to each other
Chorus 1
But nothing good can last
Cause at the end it turns to dust
This story has just begun
I wanna be more than friends
Verse 2
We were always in trouble
Then we got in a fight
Just the usual stupid stuff
But I took it too light
Chorus 2
This good thing isn't lasting
At the end it'll turn to dust
I won't let the story end there
We'll stay more than friends
Bridge
Something went wrong
Was it something I said
Did I do something wrong
I'm starting to get serious now
Verse 3
Next you decided
To do something I didn't see coming
I thought we were perfect together
Why did you call it quits on me
Chorus 3 (music gets slow and goes to picking one string at a time)
This good thing didn't last
Our relationship is in the dust
But this story is far from over
Can we start as friends again
ok. all thoughts/crit welcome.
I need something to go off of here....I keep imagining Nickleback
wat do ya need to know and ill tell u. i dont think i was listening to ne thing when i wrote this, but nickelback is 1 of my fav bands, so it might sound similar for that reason....
Do you have a melody in mind? The words are simple and the theme is fluent throughout but I cant seem to grasp any emotion.
i have a basic melody in mind, but i dont know how to describe a melody in a forum....
I know...thats why its hard for me to imagine it as a song cuz I cant hear it. Do you have any friend that you can play it for...What do they think of it?
not yet, i have this posted on other sites, and i found some1 on 1 of those sites that's gonna try to take it on and writes sum music for it and a couple of others ive written...stay tuned
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