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Thu 29 Dec, 2005 11:45 pm
b as harsh as u like. My latest song. Im kinda picturing a Nickelbackish voice with a semi fast beat.
CHOICES MADE
A father watches his son
As he presses his nose against a store window
Looking at what he's been saving for
Its been three long months of waiting
And he can finally buy it
Then he hears some one call in the distance
Everyone has to make choices
Choices between right and easy
What could've been
Isn't always what should've been
Slowly the boy turn his head
He sees the firefighter
The one with a boot in his hand
Collecting disaster relief
Then the father saw his son
As he emptied his pocket into the boot
Everyone has to make choices
Choices between right and easy
What could've been
Isn't always what should've been
possible guitar solo
The firefighter smiles at the small boy
The one with a giving heart
A young son made the choice
And chose what was right
Then his father looked down at him
But all he could say was "You're some one's hero today"
This seemed more like a poem so I rewrote it, and I think it might b a little better, but it still is more of a poem. I guess this story just wants to b a poem. oh well.
The Choice Made
Its been three long months of waiting
For his perfect pet
Sending every spare moment planning
For the dog he can now get
Shadows stand over us all
Causing us to doubt
And helping us make the choice
Between right and easy
A father watches his son
As he presses his nose against a window
But the prize is not yet won
For over him stands a shadow
Shadows stand over us all
Causing us to doubt
And helping us make the choice
Between right and easy
This boy was faced with a choice
A choice between right and easy
Did he listen to the shadow
Or did he claim his prize
Away walked the boy
Toward the corner with the lonely
Firefighter standing with a boot
And with a smile emptied his pockets
It's much better. You're really good at this.
^thanx, im alright. im still an amateur, but i wont b forever. ne how thanx for the compliment, i was starting to think no 1 would comment on this. lol.
I really like the poem version, but I think the song would be just as good. Call me when your CD comes out
^thanx. sure, no prob (but i think i should try getting in a band first. lol.). ne body have ne crit though? evrybody here is very nice bout everything i write, which i like that too, but im posting these to make them bettr. im thinking of changing the chorus. something like
Right and easy
The choice isnt always simple (betr word ne one?)
Right and Easy
You'll be torn a part
When you're faced with the decision
The decision between right and easy
ne opinions?
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