Which of these three poems should I use?

alliO -

i cannot choose between the poems.
i think they are all very sophisticated for a high school student and I am impressed.
hope you keep writing.

carlotta

alli0- I was most impressed with "Carbon". I agree with Carlotta, very sophisticated.

IMO detracts from the power of the first stanza and doesn't fit.

somewhat redundant and expected. It's a provocative poem; perhaps you can find an adjective with more power, more telling than yellow.




This is the only part where I am lost. The "one" truth ...one black one white? I hope to understand with a re-reading.

Alli0 I really hope you receive the scholarship. I love this poem. You did a fine job. Your last line is a knock out, and the scenarios in the poem work well. Thank you for sharing, and I hope something I said is of use.
Best of luck.

AlliO,
I chose Summer Slaves. I was intrigued by the rhyme scheme. And, the imagery was good. I think it could use a little more fluidity, though; it's a little choppy at times. Otherwise, great poem.

Carlotta,
You know, I'm still in highschool too.

a note to CrazyDiamond,

Well, I am surprised! I HAVE kids in high school and they can't write as well as you. And, I must say, your style keeps improving. Good work, Crazy. I hope I'm still reading you 20 years from now.

carlotta

Correction: Actually my gorgeous daughter just went to college. Gack!

Thanks so much Carlotta I wish only the best for you and your kids!