Let Me Out

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This place is claustrophobic.
The walls are screaming
Let me breath.
Take away this burden damn disease.

Don't show me to the closet
Or shut my locking door
Cause darkness, cold darkness
Lurks behind these evil walls.

Just let me out
Of the shell
Of the hell
You created.

Just let me out
Of the shell
Of the hell
You created.

The elder people speaking
The chatter seeping through the walls.
What is this
My burden damn disease?

They speak like I can't hear them
But they don't keep it down.
They say i've lost my way again
But its cause you bring me down.

Just let me out
Of the shell
Of the hell
You created.

Just let me out
Of the shell
Of the hell
You created.

I'm on empty, i'm losing control.

Let me out.

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I can relate to being claustrophobic. I don't have a disease, but I desire to soar free through the stars. You know, if you could center this poem, it would make a beautiful design. But, we don't have a centering feature here.

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I'm not a literary critic, but I like this poem, Pessi.

<and, I can't help it, are you ok?>

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i hate it

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Deler, want to add to that?

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Angelique- You always have such great ideas, thanks.

littlek wrote:

<and, I can't help it, are you ok?>

Thank you littlek for being concerned. I appreciate it. Oddly enough, I feel better then I have in a long time. I've been writing alot lately, yes, a lot of weird, crazy stuff but it's all part of my feeling better with myself and life process. Coming to terms with the past, and feeling good to let it go. And I feel great!

Deler-I appreciate your brutal honesty. Thanks.

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Welcome

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Ok, Pessi, glad to hear it! I get where you're at, more or less.

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not the poem, what it's about

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Deler..... I understand that!

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Hehe, fair enough! This poem is actually a song I wrote. It's a heavier rock feel with alot of distortion. My first song ever like this, as I am into the really mellow stuff.

I think this poem/song could be taken vairios ways. It would be interesting to see how you all took it, but that's a personal choice if you wanna share or not.

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I thought it was rather lyrical.

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It's hard to explain what it meant to me, it was just a way of expressing the life i'm stuck in right now, the world i've built and/or others have built for me is hard to deal with and the thought of those in the other room not understanding this as a hard situation and instead thinking i'm weak, well thats the trapped feeling I have

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