Two challenge poems

I dont really care for the first but i cant say why.
Its well done and all just not my thing i guess.

The second one i like its a lovely picture you piant
in it

Thanks for your comment.

I enjoyed both, perhaps i'll read them again later in a better mindset

Glad you enjoyed them deler. I wrote a few others in the spontaneous poems thread in this section.

The second one I can't say much for, it's not my style really. I liked the first poem very much. Wisdom seethes from it. Well done.

Thanks for your comment CD.

Yo, I'm not much into Poems and stuff, More battlerappin'/freestyle.. but I was feelin' both poems, had good emotion.. The Magic one was kool.. Closer was nice... Keep it up..

Thank you dr_eryk. I'm going to learn how to write a rap poem just for you.

thanks again

lol word, a RAP POEM? lol okay, I'll be learnin' somethin' also in the process like what a rap poem is? lol...

LOL

Your laughing at me is worse than your insults in the rap you just made. LOL

lol okay... ****, U really do live on this site. damn... now that's an insult itself... damn..

Did you check your pm?

No? Should I?

Yes

Oh yeah, Just checked it out... Kat had some nice lines.. but speakin' from a rapper point of view it was nice.. nice meta's in some.. but he was forcin' his multies.. I'll show you a rap I have written down... in word. check it.

On the verge of insanity this urging has branded me
I'm no longer refuting wit courage and candid ease
I herd ?'em in canneries preserving its grand physique
Popping corks, opening then serving enchanted treats
Find me blurting obscenities to herbage by-standing me
Sip so much, tongue's blurring wit stammered speech
A servant to Brandy's beast it's certain my glands secretes ..
An improper stench as if bourbon was crammed in me
Worst than an amputee I'm an unworthy outlandish creep ..
Supplying my addiction .. splurging a grand a week!!
Referred to as land debris shitty like birds upon canopies
Tried rehab, but even that verdict had bland decrees
Put the hurt on this canvas piece .. a wounded image
Played it out, but didn't know whom to scrimmage
I end up gloomed and injured, did all it asked of me
But somehow I'm the one who sat in seats of blasphemy
You cats will see but for me it's too late to call quits
Cuz the idea of soberness is too irate to brawl wit
So I take in all hits .. c'mon .. me stall? You kidding
Cuz if the bottle's big enough .. I'd crawl up in it!!!
And swallow till all is finished, a quarter or not
I stay bent .. sort of similar to how an accordion flops
Warning the cops, stay clear when I corner a doc
"Best prescribe me," cuz I'll never stop ordering shots


...blah..

but Pc, it was nice arguin' with U anways. lol

I like it, it's good!

I have a lot to learn about rap, but, this seemed more like poetry to me. That is why I go to the place you just checked out, to see if I can get the hang of it. But, I guess I don't.