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Sun 13 Nov, 2005 04:01 am
Thundering
I hear thundering
Wonderful sound
Beautiful flashing light
The structure
I dwell in
With its glass oculars
Prevent me
From admiring
The beauty of
My true
Natural home
My mind
Can only imagine
How our cosmic parents
In a thundering
Dance of passion
Gave life to all
I hear thundering
Ah, creation
Never ceases
©11/13/05
Magic
Magic is
That I am
That I touch you
That I taste you
That I see your magic
That I smell your essence
That I hear your song
That I feel when your magic mingles with mine
That our magic creates more magic
Magic is
That we live under a blue and white dome crowned with gold
That our bed is colorful and fragrant with rainbow flowers
That a myriad of creatures keep us company and sustain our life
That mother Gaia gave us the intellect to create more magic
That is what magic is
©11/12/05
I dont really care for the first but i cant say why.
Its well done and all just not my thing i guess.
The second one i like its a lovely picture you piant
in it
I enjoyed both, perhaps i'll read them again later in a better mindset
Glad you enjoyed them deler. I wrote a few others in the spontaneous poems thread in this section.
The second one I can't say much for, it's not my style really. I liked the first poem very much. Wisdom seethes from it. Well done.
Thanks for your comment CD.
Yo, I'm not much into Poems and stuff, More battlerappin'/freestyle.. but I was feelin' both poems, had good emotion.. The Magic one was kool.. Closer was nice... Keep it up..
Thank you dr_eryk. I'm going to learn how to write a rap poem just for you.
thanks again
lol word, a RAP POEM? lol okay, I'll be learnin' somethin' also in the process like what a rap poem is? lol...
Your laughing at me is worse than your insults in the rap you just made. LOL
lol okay... ****, U really do live on this site. damn... now that's an insult itself... damn..
Oh yeah, Just checked it out... Kat had some nice lines.. but speakin' from a rapper point of view it was nice.. nice meta's in some.. but he was forcin' his multies.. I'll show you a rap I have written down... in word. check it.
but Pc, it was nice arguin' with U anways. lol
I like it, it's good!
I have a lot to learn about rap, but, this seemed more like poetry to me. That is why I go to the place you just checked out, to see if I can get the hang of it. But, I guess I don't.
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