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Mon 17 Oct, 2005 12:12 am
THE PRINCESS IN A SEA-GIRT TOWER
by Robert Davidson.
A princess stood in a sea-girt tower
With face innocent, moon-pale and fair,
A sly smile kindled brightly in her eyes
As she gave me look for look so rare.
Sleeping Beauty awaits the husband kiss,
Such sensual thoughts in my mind so ran
As I stood on the wharf, rapt by longing.
She's so hungering for her conquering man.
I took a flashlight photograph of her
Silhouetted against the bright sky-line,
As she posed nude one night on a sand-bar
Just off the shore, and so I thought her mine.
But fate's despot thumb was downward turned
And I knew my lustful days were done.
The ship with her real lover now returned
And I knew she'd played with me for fun.
It has been oh, so long since life was love
And as the grey years pass, I'm just struck dumb.
It seems that I was too enthralled of her
But then, the hearts of older men are numb.
Your poetry is very beautifully written and romantic Robert. I like all of them (except for the Bluebeard one - that one didn't strike me quite as much as the others).
One question, has the narrator of your poems made the object of his affections aware of his feelings? It's obvious the speaker is so sad, but not as obvious that he's made the woman aware of his feelings. Maybe that would make a difference in her response to him. But that would also erase all the conflict and maybe that's not your aim. (Just like a woman to look for a happy ending, huh?)
But I love the story you are creating here with your poems. If you put the plot of all of them together and wrote them up in prose - you'd have quite an unrequited love story.
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