Reply Tue 11 Oct, 2005 03:03 pm
It stands empty now-
garden plowed over and roof removed,
remnants of voices and dreams once contained
by walls and ceilings,
set free to rise like ghosts and hover-
blue memories in an
unfeeling sky.

Gone now, all that had been.
An auction of plaster, wood and shingle-
the sale of your hopes.
Martins swoop
through windows of air.
Leaves skitter over floors
worn smooth by years
of children's feet.

Erased from your eyes, the view
of the levels, silvered and watery
and green with forested knolls.
Jasmine and trailing juniper vines
twine unfettered choking
dark oleander, red berries stain
the untended earth.

He comes to you now, you hear his voice
at night when you are there again
in those rooms open to black air and stars.
And you are lifted - released-
Shed of flesh and bone and skin-
weightless as a whisper
at home in your sky.
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Reply Tue 11 Oct, 2005 07:26 pm
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Reply Fri 14 Oct, 2005 02:15 pm
Well written! Smile
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Reply Wed 19 Oct, 2005 03:06 am

This is beautifully written. The ruins of an old home. And all the memories shown through your very evocative images and lucid words. I enjoyed this poem immensely.

Robert Davidson.
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Reply Fri 21 Oct, 2005 02:03 am
Thank you Robert.
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Reply Sat 22 Oct, 2005 03:31 pm
Beautifully crafted with great imagery....I especially like "weightless as a whisper". Well done!
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Reply Sun 30 Oct, 2005 02:00 am
Well written aidan
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