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Sat 24 Sep, 2005 11:12 am
Hi, I was doing some writing before if you still remember, and stopped for
some time. Now I’m trying again, and I hope that I’m not any worse than
before.
A genius
Olga Nataliova
Abeer doesn’t know why she suddenly found herself in the world fantasia.
She was in her bed; reading from worried moments. She was lost in her
black thoughts as usual, and thinks it’s time to find some jobs. She doesn’t
know what to do except what she was doing before marriage. Does Jame
still need a girl on this level of stupidity to watch the children when they
play video games?!
Does Jame still own the video games shop?, or is he involved in that new
activity that everybody does when finds a one meter space?. This mobile
phones accessories business. There is a general insanity called
communication that hit everybody. We are turned to be a nation of
businessmen.
Despite this, the human relationship got more cold and superficial. The
interconnection didn’t increase, but everything disgusting, awful, and
despicable.
She was deep in her thoughts, thinking how she has to follow this
cheerless caravan so she won’t be starved.
When she got lost in that mysterious world which was close to death, she
found herself once again in a month standing with guider in fantasia.
P.S this a translation from an Egyptian stories by Dr. Ahmed Khalid.
Hey, navigator. Nice to see you writing again, my friend. I'm not quite certain if this is your original writing or if you are commenting on someone else's original writing.
There are some problems with what we call parallel structure in the body of your piece. I'll wait until you explain further.
Hey, letty. Nice to see your reply

. This is my translation to a story as
mentioned. I'm not sure if I can write myself.
Well, navigator. I won't attempt to correct anything that you have done with your excellent translation. I certainly couldn't do what you did, honey.
I would like to see more of your originals, however. <smile>
Well, thanks for considering my translation excellent. About my originals,
maybe you don't want to read, because I'm not really good at this
Navigator, don't tell yourself that, honey, ok? Just write and let us help you. <smile>