a little poem/song - whatcha think?

grrrr.

wot is this all about? anyways?

What is what all about?

errr

your poem??

Oh. Well, I forget. I remember what bits of it are about - but I'd rather not say. It's up to you, the reader, to find some meaning in it for yourself, and if you can't maybe it's not such a good poem...

Re: a little poem/song - whatcha think?
Sorry sorry didn't get here in time, agrote calm down criticism is on the way - i promise to be brutal as ever


I don't know why this line appeals to be so much but it really does.
I'm not even sure what "pepperdust and purple" is meant to entail... but I kinda get this image of someone sat in a really dusty dark attic with boxes and lots of dust and purple shadows...


Now there's a sentiment and a half


That just makes me smile. This whole poem makes me smile in fact. It's... not FUNNY... just kinda... wry I guess



Lovely. I love the poem. It manages to have a kinda insane twist that makes you smile in almost a nostalgic way (i'm not TRYING to overdig here) without being laugh out loud funny.
I'm guessing that behind some of those odd twists there was something fuelling it... but even as a stand-alone-almost-nonsensical poem... i just love it

Oooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooh. That wasn't very brutal. Can I trust you? I'm flattered, anyway, glad you like it.

It's not just " purple," "it's purple guitars," split across two lines... just to be awkward. It sounds better as just purple though, I might alter it.

I'm very glad that you've made your own interpretation of it - that's what I was going for. I was on the verge of throwing it away, but I think I'll keep it now - as long as I get the response I wanted from at least one person, then that's good enough. Thanks!

Hehe true it wasn't that brutal. When I critique properly I do it line by line and it tends to end up brutal because it's objective... somehow I can't fault you with this one.

And yeh split it... I like pepperdust and purple hehe

Righto.