Reply Wed 13 Jul, 2005 08:47 pm
Solitary Quest


Heavy the weight upon him
Steep the winding track
Long the weary wanderer must keep from looking back

Fear sucks against the marrow
Through mud and mire and mist
The heavy, dragging burden of the Solitary Quest

?'Til there on the horizon
A dead tree and a crow
With grey skies beating down on him and the raging sea below

The solitary soldier
With coldness in his breast
The heavy, dragging burden of the Solitary Quest

Above the rocks he settles
To decide upon his plight
The search for his salvation - or a slow dive into white

And fear can suck him under
Or death can set him free
"But the Quest is never over" says the black bird in the tree

'Til the lonely day is dying
And the sun sinks into red
A ball of bloody fire like the bullet in his head

And fear can suck him under
Or the truth can set him free
But before he can confess it - the bird has flown the tree

And so the path retaken
The murderous, bloody climb
Wet clay beneath to taunt him and a heart that must deny…

Love, that heals the marrow
And takes a soldier to his rest
From the heavy, dragging burden of the Solitary Quest


Dec 2004

Thanks for taking time to read this (if you have). Embarrassed
It's old-fashioned, embarrassingly (obviously) written in a drunk stupor and I cringe to reveal it, but this poem (if it is a poem) comes from a dark place and wants out.
Feel free to laugh, ignore or crit. Honest comments please.


Peace,
E
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Letty
 
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Reply Sat 16 Jul, 2005 11:42 am
Endymion, I think that poem is fantastic. I guess I identify with it in many ways. Nothing else to say, my friend. You need to write more.
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Endymion
 
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Reply Sat 16 Jul, 2005 01:15 pm
Thanks Letty

Feels as if I've been holding my breath for days.

It was good to be able to let it out. (The poem- thing I mean, not my breath).

I wrote it while I was on a long train journey and kind of hid it. So your post means a lot.

Peace,
E
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Letty
 
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Reply Sat 16 Jul, 2005 01:32 pm
Endymion, I do want you to know this. I don't patronize, my friend. If something is good, I say so. If not, I try to point out where it might be improved.

I especially felt this stanza:


Above the rocks he settles
To decide upon his plight
The search for his salvation - or a slow dive into white

WOW!

Please feel free to join us on WA2K radio, as we love original stuff there.
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Endymion
 
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Reply Sat 16 Jul, 2005 02:14 pm
Smile
Blimey. Must be my Kingly education (Stephen).:wink:
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Letty
 
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Reply Sat 16 Jul, 2005 02:34 pm
do you mind if I post your poem on WA2K?
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colorbook
 
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Reply Sat 16 Jul, 2005 06:58 pm
Well written, Endymion, I enjoyed reading it Smile
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Endymion
 
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Reply Sat 16 Jul, 2005 07:23 pm
Letty wrote:
do you mind if I post your poem on WA2K?


Of course I don't mind - I didn't write it for myself.
By the way, what is WA2K?
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Letty
 
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Reply Sat 16 Jul, 2005 08:23 pm
Well, I couldn't sleep so here I am. WA2K is a virtual radio station that I created in order to bring people from all over the world into the mix because I didn't want this site to be purely American.

colorbook is an excellent writer and poet as are many on the site. It's run like a real radio station with a little bit of everything that most stations have. We would love you to join us, endymion.
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Endymion
 
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Reply Sun 17 Jul, 2005 06:56 pm
I'd be honoured, Letty. Many thanks.

Unfortunately, my knowledge of poetry is limited - but I'd like to contribute what I can and look forward to reading other people's poems.

Just a few days ago no one on earth but me had read this poem - and now it has been read by many. Thanks for that, too. I don't exaggerate when I admit that it took me a while to post it. In the end I had to laugh at myself. I understood why I was hesitating - I was afraid people would declare my writing crap - and it actually means a great deal to me, now that I've discovered it (however limited it might be).

At the same time I wanted to share it with someone. Poetry is something new to me. It came to me at a time when I wasn't feeling too good about myself. It suprised me. Even scared me a little. This poem was strange - how I got to write it I mean. Maybe I'll write about that sometime.

Rolling Eyes Blimey - I d'narf go on sometimes.

Peace,
E
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Letty
 
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Reply Mon 18 Jul, 2005 05:37 am
Good afternoon, Endymion. I would say that you know more about poetry than you realize. Often it is when we are feeling in a "blue funk" that the inspiration comes to us, and just as painting or any artistic endeavor, there must be an inspiration.
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Endymion
 
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Reply Mon 18 Jul, 2005 04:43 pm
Yes inspiration and also, perhapes, a strong motive.
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Letty
 
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Reply Mon 18 Jul, 2005 04:56 pm
Are you all right, Brit? I enjoyed your responses on Yitwail's philosophy thread.

You see, my friend. I lost all my inspiration when a person on this site referred to as cavfancier died. It happens to us--all of us.
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Endymion
 
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Reply Mon 18 Jul, 2005 06:23 pm
Feel bad about my post on Gus' 'Hospital' thread. It's on the waggery forum, if you haven't already seen it. Sad

Made a joke about him being gone to market to sell his soap bombs.
Being thick, I took his whole story to be fiction, didn't realize about Cav.

I'm sorry for the forum's loss. You okay?
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Letty
 
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Reply Mon 18 Jul, 2005 06:50 pm
Hey, Brit. We're both okay. There's no way you could have known about Cavfancier, but I am looking forward to more of your writing, my friend.
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flushd
 
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Reply Wed 27 Jul, 2005 12:05 am
I liked this poem ENDY.
It's clean. It conjures up images well.
It reminds me of some of the old english writers.
God job.
Keep writing!
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Endymion
 
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Reply Thu 28 Jul, 2005 06:15 pm
Thanks for the post, Flushd
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