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Sat 9 Jul, 2005 04:46 am
ok EVERYONE... i'm goinG to get serious here for a minute!! yA'LL WITH ME ON THIS ONE????
miked here in denver back again been out drinkin' with a friend met a chick started mack'n had a great rack'n teeth was crackin' too much snackin' jujubees on her knees suck on these N U tees she be hack'n sent her packin' took off in her lincoln exaust was stinkin' turned the corner blinker ain't blinkin' cop pulled her over took her to the clink'n pimp named mario made her his bitch he was in prison for being a snitch the sun had risin mario was gone she had no clue of what went on... a few hours later the TV came on a tape was goin' it was showin' her a hoe'n acting like a slut all the guards done did her in the butt they gave her bone she started to groan these guards salaries paid by a government loan... makes you wonder what is going on... BUSH in office is a big ass con... BUSH in office is a big ass joke he and al queda need to choke... our soldiers being in IRAQ is just him blowing smoke up our asses... i am tired of goin to these masses to bury a friend all because of oil in the end!
LET ME BE REAL FOR A SEC... OF THE 6 OF MY CLOSE FRIENDS FROM HIGH SCHOOL THAT I ENLISTED IN THE MILITARY WITH 2 ARE ALIVE TODAY, ONE IS MISSING A LEG THE OTHER IS MISSING AN ARM, AN EYE AND A LEG...
THINK ABOUT IT... BLOOD FOR OIL, AIN'T THAT SOME ****???
Hi MIke;
Welcone to a2k.
You obviously have a lot to say and I think I would agree with most of it. But your delivery is extremely contorted.
First of all, your use of mixed capitals and lower case letters in the first line is distracting. I suggest:
OK EVERYONE... I''m going to get SERIOUS here for a minute!! Y'all with me on this one???? (I'd have made a few changes in punctuation as well.)
The last line should be written as normal sentences with first letter capitalized, etc. It should be ok to occasionally capitalize a word for EMPHASIS.
I suggest breaking the rap into separate lines. I understand it is to be spoken as a run on. But have mercy on the reader. As written it is very hard to follow.
Neo u sound like a cool guy rate my raps
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