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Fri 24 Jun, 2005 10:23 pm
If anyone steals it I'll sue
Nine wasted months I'll never get back
Will my life ever be back on track?
Wasted thousands of kisses on you
Now tell me what I'm supposed to do
Mistakes were made and cruel words were said
Maybe if I just go back to bedÂ…
I'll wake and this will be a dream
A useless, distant memory
Maybe I'll just open my eyes
Forget about the tears I cried
For you
Spent sleepless nights just thinking of us
But water fell and we turned to rust
Romantic evenings and carefree days
When tension floods in they melt away
I guess it's easy come easy go
There's just one thing I want you to know
I'll wake and this will be a dream
A useless, distant memory
Maybe I'll just open my eyes
Forget about the tears I cried
For you
Tell me what you guys think!!!
BUMP!!! Y'all please tell me what ya thnk!!!!
PLLLLLLLEEEEEEEEEAAAAAAAAAAAAASSSSSSSSSSSSEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!
y0ur verse sh0uld be 8 bars 0r 16 liinez da ho0k was mad catchy but lacked iimpact rhymes y0ur v0cab was niice but y0ur rhymes were a liil basiic but da fl0w was siick y0 iif ya iinterested iim always lo0k'n f0r an0ther d0pe textee ta c0llab0rate wiit iight jus hiit me back feel dat
Uhh... thanks? LOL... anyone else?
It may be beautiful, set to music, but the reading is somewhat bland.
your verse should be 8 bars or 16 lines whichever your more familiar with, the hook was catchy but lacked impact rhymes, your vocab was nice but your rhymes were a lil basic, but da flow was great
if your interested im always looking for another skilled textee ta collaborate wit just hit me back
^^^does that help sorry im just used to writing the other way
Gotta agree with E.B - the success of a song often depends on its setting to music etc
I'm afraid to say the lyrics themselves do little to inspire me
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