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Reply Sun 15 May, 2005 09:18 pm

When we kiss, our tongues dance so eloquently amongst each other
As if the lips of no other, have we ever possessed
that I can only compare it to the ebb and flow of the boundless sea
As it meets the sand laden shore.
When we make love,we are so consumed by one another
Making our actions so surreal, as if nothing outside of us exists
That I can only compare it to the heavens beckoning
The thunder and lightening to quench the earth.
When we touch, our bodies unite in complete harmony
Knowing that with no other, could this passion be expressed
That I can only compare it to the morning sun drawing forth the blossom
Of springs first flower, like it's never bloomed before.


Julie M. Minor

Copyright ©2005 Julie M. Minor
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Bekaboo
 
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Reply Mon 16 May, 2005 12:21 am
Ummm okay somebody's in love

It flows definitely... and conveys something

Unfortunately I am much better at dealing with raw emotion than something so apparently peaceful so it's hard for me to comment Confused

I like the idea of "As if the lips of no other, have we ever possessed"
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talentedmember
 
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Reply Mon 16 May, 2005 04:15 am
Thanks for the input Bekaboo...glad I could share them with someone! Smile
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