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I Have Not

 
 
Reply Sun 15 May, 2005 07:11 pm

I have not the chest of my lover
To lay my weary head upon
I have only my pillow reaffirming true loneliness
To put my head on
I have not the arms of my lover
To comfort me from my fears
I have only my blanket
To swallow my sorrowful tears
I have not the ear of my lover
To listen to my woes
I have only my pen and paper
To indulge as I compose.


Julie M. Minor

Copyright ©2005 Julie M. Minor
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Reply Mon 16 May, 2005 12:27 am
This i also like: it truly conveys the feeling of a lover lost

One suggestion: change line 4. It's repetitive
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