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Reply Sun 15 May, 2005 07:09 pm
From you I do not seek
precious stones
or fancy Chantilly Lace
But only to hold forever
in my hands your sun weathered face
From you I do not seek
expensive furnishings
to make our house full
But only for us to
eternally thrive
in each other's soul.
From you I do not seek
bouquets of exotic flowers
that will wither inside of a week
But only for our hearts
to be content
with each other's love.
Those my dear,
are the real tangible things
in life I seek.

Julie M. Minor

Copyright ©2005 Julie M. Minor
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Reply Mon 16 May, 2005 12:26 am
Now this i like more than the other things I've read so far as i can relate to it. I like the feel of it

I would however suggest splitting it up more evenly as, since you've made whole sentences, the cutting them up into bits just makes it very jumpy
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