stuh505 wrote:Quote:It isn't bad, but the words slime and piss are not commonly used in poetry. "Prettier" words or euphemized "ugly" words are used and when something more blunt is seen it just never seems to match.
What's your point? You seem to be complimenting him with a tone of disapproval. That he is using words like piss and slime in a poetic way is a very good thing, exactly for the reason you said, that it is not commonly done, and it works very well in this poem!
Quote:btw, does this poem have any relevent meaning? If so, could you please explain for us?
Is it not obviously a poem about drinking ones problems away, and how gross that can make one feel?
Well put. Very insightful.
The poem compares my life at the moment to that of a slug. Have you ever tried that gardener's trick where you dig a little hole and fill it with beer? All the slugs in the garden slither towards the beer, and drown in it - it's one way of getting rid of them. So at the moment, most days I feel like a slug, spending a hell of a long time doing nothing but slithering towards a pit of beer.
I insist on using the word 'piss' in all of my poems from now on - it seems to offend people, and I like that.
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