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Reply Sat 30 Apr, 2005 03:00 am
ok yall im new to this game but i will still rip my lyrics over and over again ill tell you the truth i dont feel shame so just come learn a bit in my education lane this is a little lesson about life use your brain before you interact with a knife com on man never abuse your girlfriend or wife shes just a woman in your life trying to keep you alive yer you think you can survive what happens when you get depressed and you dont have as good lingo as the rest yes pain will build up in your chest you will be back to having a bong to ease the stress so you just lay down and rest as you hesitate to be the best less i come in and pulla ur life out of the bin bad composure lift up ur chin ill jump of a cliff to make you lough and grin this is where the next part of the lesson comes in JEALOUSY jealousy is a particle in your brain when you see someone elses life so happy and plain it drives you insane so ones again you go back to maryjane so where do you want to go when your older heaven or hell well u have been as jealous as **** you did steal a buck of the school canteen lunch truck but remember the time in your dream when you and your mum got it on in the well yep ur definitely going to hell even though i made it all up the real reason is that you think your as ugily as **** sorry about this iam just telling you how life really is so have a good think about all this ow and the main plot is dont cut your own rist class dismissed
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Reply Fri 6 May, 2005 09:54 pm
I realize your lyrical style is to be spoken (rapped) in a somewhat run on fashion; but have mercy on your readers! The reason no one has commented on your work is because it is so difficult to read. Try a few line breaks, perhaps with the rhyming words at the end of the lines. Idea
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