Reply Thu 27 Jan, 2005 02:00 pm
the heavens open up
rain pours on my body
im washed of all sadness, stress and worry

a new sunrise is approaching
the warm almond sky welcomes the new light
my new light
the light of faith

with every second
my thoughts turn more and more positive
leaving the demons behind
angels lift me
my mind is in a better place
god takes my hand and shows me the way

a cloud tries to steal my sunshine
but god will protect
a swift stroke throught the air
and the sun once again beats down upon my face
a catalyst of love and joy

he has protected
he's sent his love in human form
in the form of a lover
day by day
my consciousness is fefreshed
bringing in my wildest dreams
sending my fears into oblivian
like the winter mist from ones mouth
the worries are thick and cloud my vision
but the clean air soon takes over
and i can see again
clearly
he's guided me to the good place
I am anew.
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apoeticinjustice
 
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Reply Sat 29 Jan, 2005 12:35 pm
Very nice... I particularly liked the following line

like the winter mist from ones mouth
the worries are thick and cloud my vision
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CarbonSystem
 
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Reply Sat 29 Jan, 2005 04:07 pm
Thanks, im glad you enjoyed it. when i write poems i like to use metaphors and similes. they can be so strong, and help the reader relate more to the words.
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