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Hoarfrost

 
 
Reply Mon 24 Jan, 2005 04:26 pm
Fresh falling snow,
each flake unique.

Those lucky
to cling to branches
join the elite order
of hoarfrost,

laughing at their brethren
below, trampled, shoveled,
driven over,
broken down,
salted
(what are we, caviar?)
until each individual
is crushed
into an unreconizable
brown slush.

An unexpected warm day
proves the equalizer.
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colorbook
 
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Reply Mon 24 Jan, 2005 04:36 pm
I enjoyed reading it Cav...I've been shoveling hoarfrost off my driveway for the last two days now Smile
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cavfancier
 
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Reply Mon 24 Jan, 2005 04:39 pm
Dang, it's a nightmare here, and it keeps on coming...
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ossobuco
 
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Reply Mon 24 Jan, 2005 04:52 pm
I liked it a lot too, including the dollop of caviar.
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CarbonSystem
 
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Reply Mon 24 Jan, 2005 07:15 pm
I love it, minus the dollop of caviar. The close is strong and magnificent however.
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cavfancier
 
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Reply Tue 25 Jan, 2005 08:17 am
Thanks for the feedback, all.
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