I agree about the format.....but Great job. Not that i'm a poet or anything- because i'm not (i do have a few poems posted- check 'em out)....so maybe my ideas won't hold much againt those who do know what they are talking about. But, I do know what sounds good. When i read this poem outloud...i liked how it sounded. But visually, it does look like a blob- so maybe change the format. (need any help...let me know)
Now.....i do like the comparisons....i think they add. I esp. like the librarian one....thought it was powerful. The reason i like the symbols (comparisons) is that it allowed you to visualize the memory as a thing- something you could watch....like a large room- a library, filled with books of different shapes and sizes....some old and dusty, some new with clean crisp pages....as you vision the library, you can see how all your memories are placed....they are all there- its just a matter of finding them....your librarian, if on the ball, has an easy way to find each "book" and know just were to place a new one.....but not everyone has such a librarian...and therefore some of our "books" get lost in the shuffle of life.
Sorry- went a little far with that one.....it's simply that i enjoyed your use of symbols in relation to memory....a very tricky thing. I have trouble remembering certain things (and no its not age related...i'm way too young for that) while other memories are so clear that i can't believe so much time has lapsed. Apparently my "liberian" needs a replacement....
Thank you for sharing your poem.....KEEP POSTING......and KEEP WRITING- you have a talent.
Heart-library Memory=vehicle like little chapters but its pretty good
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