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rate thes lyrics

 
 
zach123
 
Reply Sun 16 Jan, 2005 09:40 am
VERSE 1
Ive got a stain on my shirt
and theres a hole in my jeans
Ive got a guilty concious
and impossible dreams
I have seen you love
and i have seen you lie
and ive seen the guilt right in your eyes

Plz just tell me what you think even if its bad! Very Happy
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Brand X
 
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Reply Sun 16 Jan, 2005 10:12 am
Hi, I like what you have in general but think you could add a little more creativity.

How about:

I'm wearing a guilty shirt
and there's a hole in my jeans
I've got a stain on my concsious
and impossible dreams
I have seen you love
and I have felt your lies
and the guilt in your deceitful eyes
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