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Slipping...

 
 
Reply Mon 10 Jan, 2005 04:59 pm
Slipping down the long and winding spiral yet again
feeling every moment slowly tick by,
does time feel the same as it used to
not really,
from the outside you can't tell whats going on in the inside,
the internal combustion of emotions slowly releasing themselves upon a person,this feels like something one can never forget,
an enigma of pain, love, and stillness all felt inside a single human being,
how long can one last with these feelings?
is it something similar to the alice and wonderland tunnel? wheres the white rabit? When does this all stop...
until the next time that you put the pain away away away..
deep down in an envelope of love,feelings, and life.
This is how ive felt for the longest time.
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Reply Mon 10 Jan, 2005 05:54 pm
I might suggest breaking it down into shorter phrases and stanzas to give it more power, but otherwise, a good piece.
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