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motion is beautiful

 
 
Reply Mon 10 Jan, 2005 02:25 pm
it's just a yellow taxi
and it's speeding
on a graceful parallel course
the leafless trees
reveal blinking yellow
and stretching silver
curvy
faster
it's just a yellow taxi
and it's beautiful
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NickFun
 
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Reply Mon 10 Jan, 2005 02:36 pm
Yea but the Taxi driver is stoned and keeps driving me around in circles. And I have to pay for that!
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FreeDuck
 
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Reply Mon 10 Jan, 2005 02:37 pm
Hah!
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sozobe
 
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Reply Mon 10 Jan, 2005 02:45 pm
Oh, nice!

I like the use of "just" with "beautiful." I'm a sucker for tossed-off observations as opposed to Big Weighty Meaningful Statements. (The latter can be done, but are much easier to mess up, too.)
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FreeDuck
 
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Reply Mon 10 Jan, 2005 03:16 pm
Thanks, soz. I'm not much of a writer, but sometimes I feel like writing.
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tagged lyricist
 
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Reply Tue 11 Jan, 2005 04:33 pm
I like this poem whimsical like Miro
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saintabby
 
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Reply Fri 14 Jan, 2005 04:49 pm
fantastic. i love it when we describe ordinary everydat things in new inventive ways!
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