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Sat 8 Jan, 2005 11:17 pm
I don't know what to think.
You're back in my life again.
I know you're going to hurt me.
Make my mind messed up and then...
Leave me like you did before
Make me miss you even more
Leave me crying on the floor
Make me fight this emotional war
I don't know why I do this.
You rule my life again.
I forgot about our poisoned past.
Now you'll refresh my mind and then...
Leave me like you did before
Make me miss you even more
Leave me crying on the floor
Make me fight this emotional war
Always.
What a very sad piece i liked it could feel the pain and the love.Liked the style also
Oh me gawds, I love this, Pessy!!!
So sad =( And I can kiiiinda relate.
I really, really do like this. =)
Thank you, both of you!
Good to see you again joe!
Pessy, I love it! it's a sad emotional war, just like you said. It makes me think I could cry all day but I won't. I got to do stuff ^.^.... It was great as always! bye bye
Nice. I like the way it's broken up. Your style in terms of stanzas is improving! Good work.
Thanks Guys!
Glad to hear i'm improving, although this poem isn't really much, I hope to really get some words flowing soon. I've had writers block for ohh so long now!
truthful and solid. keep it up!
It sounds like it could be a very good song, too.
Congrats on your writing skills.
Thanks abby and july, perhaps once I have a few minutes to myself at home i'll try putting some chords to it!!
see, that's great. I've always had trouble making my poetry into songs. I can write songs-- but I have to go into with my guitar in hand and write it. Usually I get the chord formation down first and then hum along, making up melody, then the words follow. I guess everybody's got their own style.
I know what you mean about writing and playing at the same time. I am completely like that, but I figure practice makes perfect, and if I practice writing then playing, then maybe it'll all come together!
I love your style...unique....it was done quite nicely. I really liked this poem since it is my personal story at the very time being. You were able to put into (beautiful i must add) words what my heart has been feeling for a very long time. When i read your poem....i felt as if it came from me- it is exactly how i feel......very beautiful!
If this poem come from personal feeling- i'm very sorry....i know what it feels like.....and wish that upon NO ONE!
Anyway, great poem!
Thanks very much kendra, I appreciate you reading and enjoying what I wrote. Sorry to hear about what's goin' on with you, I know, it does hurt badly.
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