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Fri 24 Dec, 2004 07:47 pm
I put my heart in these rhymes i just cant help myself
all i can do is do what im doin and just wait for the wealth
i see the glare in ya eyes of those comin after mine
but my minds intertwind with this and cant be confind
to just one line or just one verse
my voice is gotta be heard hit the 12's and just burst
it cant be a curse but somtimes i feal that it is
its just to much power for one man influencin kids
but i handle mine do what i do and stay on the grind
its all in what you say cuz those that listen are blind
wanna be remembered as great but still dont give a **** what you think
you can call it 2nd nature or just my basic instinct
so even while you listen you better not blink
cuz you gone see my words probably alot more than you think
done came a long way and yall just dont know how
you heard what said before but listen to what im sayin now
paradox, welcome to A2K. I think your piece might be much better if you were to review your spelling and punctuation. I like the idea of what you are attempting to express, but it is difficult to read.
Should you need help in reinventing this expressive poem, let me know.
just to let you know its not a poem its a 16 bar RAP and my objective wasnt punctuation or spelling
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