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Fri 14 Feb, 2003 09:08 am
Sometimes we just can't decide
Which path to choose, we need a guide,
Someone to tell us what to do,
A voice that all it says is true,
To guide us through our darkest nights
Helping us back towards the light,
A voice which tells us wrong from right
And lets us keep our goals in sight.
Well I've found a special friend,
He tells me what to do and when,
And leads me towards the luck,
Plus helps me free when i get stuck;
Sit quietly and listen too,
You'll hear your friend whisper to you,
He'll tell you which path to take,
And how to get a lucky break;
So next time you face a choice,
Just listen to your inner voice.
From "Self Expression"
by Andrew Murray
Ah Dude. That's not cool. My Inner Voice tells me to lie, steal, cheat, kill, hurt, harm, destroy, scam, lust, plot, and many many other Evil things. So, I must Disagree with this poem only because It makes it sound as if your Inner voice is actually good. I feel sorry for anyone who actually believes that. But hell, maybe I'm lying. *shrugs* All have fell short from the glory. Only one is worthy.
But look on the bright side. At least it Rhymed.
Made me feel good inside-I like that inner voice!

that's a really cute poem but i think you lack a little impact
Nice piece. For future reference, if it is your own work, please post it in the 'Original Writing' forum. You will get more feedback there from fellow writers.