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No name for it yet really....

 
 
Reply Sun 5 Dec, 2004 06:24 pm
Whatevers best for you,
must be best for me,
whatevers good for you,
is good for me.
But when I look in your eyes, all I see is lies,
so tell me lies.
So if this is best for me,
let it be,
in this lone grave
alone and forgotten.
So whatever the best is
I must have found it.
I must have settled,
I must be happy,
You say I am, so I must be
But deep inside, i'm cold and bitter
for all the **** you did.
But it's not your fault he did that to you,
but just you wait, he'll get his yet.
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stuh505
 
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Reply Sun 5 Dec, 2004 07:10 pm
a bit creepy...
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tear jerked punk
 
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Reply Sun 5 Dec, 2004 07:28 pm
How so might I ask?
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kellyvinal
 
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Reply Mon 6 Dec, 2004 03:58 am
I think that the piece is good, overall. Somewhat raw with its inferences to a relationship embittered by lies.
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tear jerked punk
 
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Reply Mon 6 Dec, 2004 06:44 am
Yeah... I'm sometims A really bitter person.. People say it doesnt suit me so I'm like "YOU KNOW WHAT!?.... whatever.... It somethen I wrote when I was bored.... and listenen to a song
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