Rate and correct my lyrics please.

what is the music like? What "genre"?
I like it alot - but I think the music could change alot, obviously.

Just one thing, why the allusion to suicide? I, personally, think that that topic is over glorified. (You only have to look at the t-shirt designs on http://www.threadless.com that people submit, to give you one example).
If you are ok with the reference, and it is not a really obvious in your face (I suspect?) reference, then go for it.

I dunno the type of music . thaankz for the feed back but the link you gave me abou t the shirts didn't give me no clues

hey can you check this rap out for me
THIS HAS cussing,alot of killing,and alot of street stuff so if u dont want to DONT READ/RATE THIS but if u dont mind then plz read

me n ryan gunna make da beat down da street we will make yo moma beat his meat suck his feet gave your mom a treat its whack we gunna beat ur moms back gunna have a heart a attack do it in the shack she dont listen u hear that SMACK she is busty her sex is rusty were gunna rhyme in do time mabey after ur mom gets that slime off and she stops that cough she gay she pay us to rape her all day hey we made it hurt she tried to flirt with me i took a pea on her and on per pink fur coat we ran with her cash n bought a boat we capped her and made her body float in my moat that doesnt stop there we cut her kitty bear then we started to swear BITCH WE DONT REALLY CARE then we took our fare no it still doesnt stop there we started to share the cash she had we are really bad but she had to make us mad or reallly sad are cloths are a new fad and this ends the story of the whorre who opened the door

Artist:adrian and ryan
song:we didnt stop there