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In A Whisper

 
 
Seed
 
Reply Tue 30 Nov, 2004 06:53 pm
In the shadows I saw you
timid and shy were you
together our futures would mesh
if only you would be true
I heard you scream no
to the question of life with me
But in your whispers i heard yes
i heard you scream go away
when i stayed by you side
but in your whispers i heard stay
I heard you scream die
when i asked for your love
but what you didnt know
is died with every little scream
each more with every whisper
for you torn at my soul
with your indecision
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Brand X
 
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Reply Tue 30 Nov, 2004 07:02 pm
Ah, the gut wrenching fun of rejection and indecision....

Nice depiction of the awkwardness of a new encounter...the intrigue and uncertainty intertwined.

At least that's how I read it, nice!
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kellyvinal
 
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Reply Wed 1 Dec, 2004 06:54 am
Smart and well-scripted, seed. Tidy up a bit and submit this one!
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