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Sun 21 Nov, 2004 11:12 am
Hello to all those who care to read my poetry. I'm very new to this forum, and to writing in general.
I would appreciate any constructive critique you may have regarding this piece.
Many thanks,
Rory
Winds Of The High Lonesome
The High Lonesome whispers seductively to me
Summoning me with a promise of renewed serenity
With velvet soft winds it draws me to the peak
Of this mountain where my Gods congregate
The winds here teach life's unspoken lessons
To those with patience enough to learn
I stand unmoving, silently reflecting inward
Upon life's many trails that I've traveled
Careers, loves and lives I've encountered
Triumphs, decisions, mistakes and adventures
All are revealed to the unnatural Gods
Then blown away as dandelion fluff on the wind
Clouds, moody and heavy, settle in around me
While a coolness envelopes my entire being
I feel torn, as if being ripped inside out
My most guarded secrets exposed to the mountain
Rain begins to drum a heartbeat into the rocks
With a steady, musical spattering of holy water
Soon it washes over me, blending with the tears
That I shed uncontrollably and unashamed
Once more these mountain gods have guided me
To some higher place and higher understanding
My tarnished and tattered soul has been cleansed
And set free by the winds of the High Lonesome
Welcome to A2K! What a great start to your time here! The visualizations and flow of this poem are awesome! It is a nice and imaginative piece - kudos!
thanks kellyvinal, I appreciate your comments.
Yes. A good beginning. Welcome.
Apoeticinjustice, your poem is beautiful, with a very physical feeling quietly blending with the spiritual. I may be prejudiced, however, because this is one of my favorite subjects.
thanks Edgar and Diane, I appreciate you taking the time to respond.
Diane, this is one of my favorite subjects as well. I tend to keep coming back to it over and over.
Rory
Write until is haunts ye nay further :-)
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