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Together we were never.

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InTraNsiTiOn
 
Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 05:35 pm
Together we are happy.
Together we are free.
Together we are everything
I always wanted us to be.

Together my life makes sense.
Together we fill a void.
Together we were one
but now I am destroyed.

Together we forgot our love
Together we dug this hole.
Together we broke our hearts
and lost complete control.

Together we were never.
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tear jerked punk
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 08:11 pm
Pessy, that was well just 'wow' it start's with deep love and end's in a spiraling hell. Wow, it's all I can say
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InTraNsiTiOn
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 08:15 pm
Really? Well thanks, means alot to me!
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tear jerked punk
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 08:18 pm
Hey, it was good, it's all I can say. I just love how at one moment its happy and the next it's tottally depressing.
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InTraNsiTiOn
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 08:20 pm
Yeah, me too....I was wondering if people would understand what I was tryin' to say. Thanks for reading and commenting, muchly appreciated!
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tear jerked punk
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 08:21 pm
No, thank you for posting the poem, and allowing us to read it. Wink
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theollady
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 09:02 pm
Good words, pessy.
Captures the mood of thousands of couples, beginning with such optimism, and ending with nothing.

Poems may not CURE THAT Confused , but they sure can depict it, hey?
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InTraNsiTiOn
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 09:10 pm
For sure theo, thanks for reading!
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carbuncle
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 10:13 pm
Actually,I skipped it when I saw it was a poem and went to the next posts,but that just made me go back to it. That was very cool! Reminds me of my last 3 girlfriends!! Sooooo......dont keep us waiting, when's the next one?! Mr. Green
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InTraNsiTiOn
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 10:30 pm
Well thanks for changing your mind!
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tear jerked punk
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 10:32 pm
Pessy's quite the talented writer... if you ask me
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carbuncle
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 10:59 pm
Agreed. But like I said, are you going to do another one? You've got insight,girl! Um...you are a girl,right? There I go again..*bangs head on table*.."stupid,stupid......" Sorry if your not...... Sad
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tear jerked punk
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 11:02 pm
*pats carbuncle on the back* it'll be ok. hahaha
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InTraNsiTiOn
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 11:03 pm
carbuncle wrote:
Agreed. But like I said, are you going to do another one? You've got insight,girl! Um...you are a girl,right? There I go again..*bangs head on table*.."stupid,stupid......" Sorry if your not...... Sad


Is it I you are addressing? If so, I would love to write more, but it has to come naturally and I guess i'm not quite ready yet!
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InTraNsiTiOn
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 11:05 pm
But, if you go back through the o.w forum I have many many posts. I suggest skipping some of the newet stuff cause i'm not too proud of it, but my earlier stuff was not too shabby!
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carbuncle
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 11:25 pm
Excellent!! But what is O.W.? This is my 1rst day here and havent checked too far around this crazy little world yet(except the trivia and word games parts). Is it "Outlandish Wallpaper" or "Ostrisized Wombat"? I still cant even pm anyone,how long does that take anyway?
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InTraNsiTiOn
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 11:27 pm
O.W=original writing.

As for your question, I don't know! Ask in the forum help!
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Rainbow Leprechauns
 
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Reply Sat 20 Nov, 2004 11:42 pm
Oh my goddess, I absolutely love this. I can relate to it, even.
I like that it rhymes, heh, I haven't seen rhyming poems for a while.

Bebo probably likes this a lot cuz he can relate to it too. Man, this poem is just Awesome
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