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I'm not biting

 
 
Reply Sun 7 Nov, 2004 09:39 pm
He says you still love me.
He says he can see it in your eyes.
Tell me it's not true because
I don't think I can take the pain again.

You're everything I ever wanted in this life.
Everything I know i'll never have.
So now that i've almost accepted that
Please don't lead me on.

I've come this far, I don't want to be brought down.
Years of denial to make it all go away.
You made me everything I stand for.
Everything I am today.

I'm going to pretend that I didn't hear
what he just said.
And you will be as far away from me.
Never again to enter my head.
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Seed
 
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Reply Sun 7 Nov, 2004 09:54 pm
she says its in my eyes
yet eyes lie
just like you did to me

i saw it in your eyes
you looked right at me
yet the words were false

you didnt bat an eye
yet turned the world with 3 words
i thought you were honest

sorry, i should have made my own thread but i was inspired
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InTraNsiTiOn
 
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Reply Sun 7 Nov, 2004 10:09 pm
No problem seed, it's very good....thanks for sharing.....I like how you say "eye's lie" becaus ethat they do!
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Seed
 
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Reply Sun 7 Nov, 2004 10:12 pm
thanks pessi... Smile
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InTraNsiTiOn
 
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Reply Mon 8 Nov, 2004 07:22 am
Seed, I think you should come up with more to your poem, I think it's really good, but it needs more...more, more, more!!! Talk to you later!
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Seed
 
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Reply Mon 8 Nov, 2004 11:34 am
thats a great edit pessi Smile
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InTraNsiTiOn
 
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Reply Mon 8 Nov, 2004 05:53 pm
Thanks seed!!
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kellyvinal
 
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Reply Fri 12 Nov, 2004 10:46 am
The eyes are the gateway to the soul. Very nice piece, pessimist! Nice, indeed! I can see that :-)
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InTraNsiTiOn
 
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Reply Fri 12 Nov, 2004 05:10 pm
Thank you!
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