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Three Tanka on a theme (reprint)

 
 
Reply Fri 1 Oct, 2004 09:07 am
The men that loved her
Knew not what was in her soul.
The pain, the anguish,
That led her to deep waters,
Where she drowned all her passion.

Her thoughts turned to home,
Elusive, transitory
Source of memories.
In dark pavement tapestries
She moved in search of solace.

She would fall again
Tonight, into the black pool
Of a stranger's eyes
Diving momentarily
Into a false happiness.
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Piffka
 
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Reply Fri 1 Oct, 2004 09:11 am
Passion, Solace, Happiness.
Nice. I love Tankas, they make a haiku complete. These are very good -- beautifully evocative images.
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colorbook
 
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Reply Fri 1 Oct, 2004 09:50 am
Very good! I can envision her sad story.
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kellyvinal
 
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Reply Fri 1 Oct, 2004 12:18 pm
A sad tale spun with silken threads. Nice!
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