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In Dark Dreams (rewrite, thinking of a title change)

 
 
Reply Thu 30 Sep, 2004 05:13 am
In dark dreams I carry
the weight of a thousand suns,
tugging at
the collar of Cerberus,
and the breath-short hearts
of the dying.

In dark dreams I carry the earth,
wondering if Dorian Gray could restore
its plundered beauty.

Through the cracks
in concrete fetters
a single wilted daffodil
perseveres.
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kellyvinal
 
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Reply Thu 30 Sep, 2004 05:22 am
Title is fine - poem is cerebral and excellent!
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cavfancier
 
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Reply Thu 30 Sep, 2004 06:46 am
Thanks kelly. Sometimes I find 'dark' a bit of a cliche, especially when linked with 'dreams', but maybe it's because so many people write about 'darkness', some well, most poorly. I get my 'dark' kick from Swinburne, actually, not so popular these days, but a damn fine writer. For modernism, I am a huge fan of Delmore Schwartz.
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stuh505
 
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Reply Thu 30 Sep, 2004 08:43 am
wasn't Dorian Gray the name of the alien in Dreamcatcher?
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cavfancier
 
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Reply Thu 30 Sep, 2004 08:49 pm
stuh505 wrote:
wasn't Dorian Gray the name of the alien in Dreamcatcher?


Never heard of it. I was thinking more along the lines of the Oscar Wilde character.
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Col Man
 
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Reply Thu 30 Sep, 2004 09:04 pm
i remember dorian gray was the guy in 'league of extraordinary gnetlemen' who couldnt be killed
cos hed swapped his real self with his reflection on a painting
and cav have you noticed c.i. is back?
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cavfancier
 
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Reply Thu 30 Sep, 2004 09:07 pm
Col man, that would be the right character, although you should probably read the novel. It's a bit different, but along those lines. He did preserve his youth in a portrait. The portrait aged, while he didn't, but he met with a horrible death in the end. I just noticed that c.i. was back while browsing. Yay!
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Col Man
 
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Reply Thu 30 Sep, 2004 09:09 pm
Very Happy
yes same guy then....
in the film he died when the woman (nina harket?)showed him his potrait
which novel is this?
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cavfancier
 
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Reply Thu 30 Sep, 2004 09:12 pm
"The Picture of Dorian Gray" by Oscar Wilde. Lucky for you, it's public domain now, and readable here: http://www.hoboes.com/html/FireBlade/Wilde/dorian/
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Col Man
 
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Reply Thu 30 Sep, 2004 09:13 pm
ok nice one bro. thx...
ill check it out Smile
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colorbook
 
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Reply Thu 30 Sep, 2004 09:21 pm
The title is perfect--perseverance has taken away the harshness of the darkness-- I really like this one Cav Smile
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cavfancier
 
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Reply Thu 30 Sep, 2004 09:22 pm
Thanks colorbook!
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colorbook
 
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Reply Thu 30 Sep, 2004 09:29 pm
Your welcome Smile
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