Reply Wed 29 Sep, 2004 06:53 am
Today, I saw a semicolon,
interspersed between my question,
and your pause.
Was this a separation
of an independent clause
different from mine?
Strong comma indeed,
dividing us in thought.

At least it was no full stop,
with its sad echo of finality,
just a pause,
long and dreary,
carrying with it the hope
of continuance.
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the prince
 
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Reply Wed 29 Sep, 2004 07:04 am
Stunning !!!
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cavfancier
 
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Reply Wed 29 Sep, 2004 07:09 am
Thank you G.! I am editing a bunch of stuff for submission, so you may see a lot of my posts in this forum, for feedback. Smile
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Reply Wed 29 Sep, 2004 10:16 am
Are there any bounds to your talents? Excellent and witty!
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