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askchester
 
Reply Tue 21 Sep, 2004 01:34 pm
paper crowns litter the heavens
a burning thought
moves the constellation

the lights shoots down
my eyes

i believe my reflections are living dreams
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cavfancier
 
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Reply Tue 21 Sep, 2004 01:38 pm
Very nice. You have a talent for compression.
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kellyvinal
 
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Reply Tue 21 Sep, 2004 01:38 pm
Subtle! Well done!
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cavfancier
 
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Reply Tue 21 Sep, 2004 01:39 pm
The first line reminds me of both 'paper tigers' and 'false gods.'
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