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Black Diamonds

 
 
Reply Mon 20 Sep, 2004 09:47 am
Black Diamonds

And they will come, the telling whispers
On a breeze of salts and mist, the ocean
Won't prevaricate for prince or pauper -
And she will move
With the rhythms of that nightly vida -
Viva -
Boardwalk, beaten, worn,
Not proper, nor concerned with
Social conformity or fate

That weight she bears alone -

You might have missed introspection
Looking out across a foggy sea
Every thought of reflection
Falling to the stones below your feet

And she left her child upon the pier, swimming
Just beyond his comfort zone,
To her arms, yearning him:
"Come to me boy"
No fear, he leapt
Vida -
Red hair, wet ponytail,
Freckles, black diamonds in her ears -
She embraces him.
Viva

Monday's poem - hot off the word processor!
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cavfancier
 
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Reply Mon 20 Sep, 2004 09:59 am
Excellent! Vivid, flowing, great piece.
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panzade
 
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Reply Mon 20 Sep, 2004 10:08 am
I'm jealous...keep it up
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tagged lyricist
 
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Reply Mon 20 Sep, 2004 03:57 pm
i like the poem, I'm very impressed with the structure and the three dimensionality of it
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kellyvinal
 
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Reply Tue 21 Sep, 2004 11:48 am
I thank you all for your very kind commentary :-)
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InTraNsiTiOn
 
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Reply Tue 21 Sep, 2004 11:53 am
I just came across this one! Excellent piece, really! Infact, ditto to everything Cav said!
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kellyvinal
 
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Reply Tue 21 Sep, 2004 01:39 pm
Thank you, stand up!
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