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Wed 15 Sep, 2004 02:36 pm
For the first time, I saw you cry.
Each tear you shed, Because of me.
For the first time, I felt your pain.
The internal bruises,
I slapped across your face.
The constant pushing and pulling.
The screams I refused to hear.
The tears I refused to see.
The pain I refused to feel.
Because it was all about me,
My screams,
My tears,
My pain.
I hold you now,
For real this time.
I hear you now.
I feel you now.
The sentiments and emotions are excellent! One minor grammatical point...the first line should read: "For the first time, I have (or I've) seen you cry" or "For the first time, I saw you cry." Aside from that, great expression.
Thanks cav, glad you corrected me. At one point I was going to use "I saw you cry", but I was unsure.
I think, and it's just my opinion, that "I saw you cry" is more wistful and poetic. Good instinct, fellow Virgo.