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Showdown, original story about a rivalry

 
 
Reply Tue 17 Aug, 2004 10:40 am
This is one of my original stories.. it's not very good .. it's still a rough draft i've got around 10 chapters.. please let me know what you think
it might start out slow.. just bare with me thanks i need some feeback

Chapter I

There's nothing quite like the first day of school. A continuation of hell for the students at Bellevue High. Luckily, I still had my best friends Marc Picconi and Johnny Ruger. We three had been tight since the seventh grade. Walking down the hall to our next class, we turned as we heard a group of guys jeering and laughing.
"Check it outtt! It's tough guy Morrison with his little friends," shouted Parker Mahoney to his buddies. "You ready to get your butt kicked in basketball tryouts next week?" he goaded me.
"Bring it," I replied calmly, undaunted by his remarks. I turned away from him and looked at Michael Jamison, the leader of their gang, who called themselves the Jaysters. "You been practicing all summer, Jamison?" I asked the 6'2 starting guard of the junior varsity basketball team last season. He had led the team in points and assists in a stellar season the year before. I had been the leading point man for the Bellevue Bulldogs before he came.
"Actually, not so much." He said the words loud enough so that almost everyone in the hallway could hear. "I've been too busy answering calls from different colleges about scholarships. They all wanna see me play." I could tell he was enjoying this. He smiled dryly at Marc and Johnny and then sauntered off with the Jaysters.

"I cannot believe you haven't seen her, man!" Johnny tried to say through mouthfuls of his pepperoni calzone.
"Yeah, I gotta tell ya, buddy. She is gorgeous!" Marc said the last three words slowly, nodding enthusiastically. "Her name's Emily Vicardo. Just moved here in August from Miami, Florida." Marc added emphasis to Miami, Florida.
"You have a girlfriend, Marc. Remember? Tall, blonde hair, blue eyes? What was her name? Oh, right. Vanessa Hogart." I said sarcastically.
"Shut up, man. And thanks for bringing up the fact that I have a girlfriend and you don't. Aw, crap. I just remembered that I promised to meet Vanessa in the library during lunch." Marc took a last sip of his milk, gathered his things and headed for the library. "See ya after school, Johnny," he called after his shoulder.
"What're you guys doing after school?" I asked, rummaging through my bag to find my schedule.
"We were planning to go to the courts and practice. Wanna come?" Johnny wiped his mouth and looked up at me.
"Sure. Where should I meet you guys? Great, I got Tolaski next. I hear her dull voice will put you to sleep like that." I pressed my fingers together in a quick, loud snap.
"Don't worry about it, man. Emily's got that class too. Just stare at her the whole time." Johnny quipped, chuckling. The bell rang, signaling the next period was to start in four minutes. People began shuffling out of the cafeteria to their appointed classes. "Meet me and Marc at the courts at 3:30. Bring your ball." Johnny shouted after me.

"Class. I would like to introduce you all to Emily Vicardo." Mrs. Tolaski gestured her hand at the smiling girl standing next to her. "She has relocated here from Miami, Florida." Tolaski monotonously announced, although practically everyone in the room already knew who she was. "Emily, please tell us a little bit about yourself." Mrs. Tolaski plopped down into her comfy chair behind her desk and tried not to look bored as she took a sip of her coffee.
I stared at Emily totally intrigued, trying not to lean forward and drool all over the desk. "?-I love cheerleading, volleyball, surfing, --" Emily was telling the class. She was a beauty just like Johnny and Marc had said. Her straight brown hair accented her green eyes. She had good posture and a great tan - probably from all the surfing and volleyball she had done back in Miami. I peered around at the class and saw that all the guys were entranced by her and the girls looked at Emily a little jealously.
Her seat was diagonally on the left side of my seat. Joe Matthews sat in front of me on the right side of her, while Mike Jamison sat on her left. She walked with great poise and sat down. Mike grinned at her and she smiled politely back.
Mrs. Tolaski went on and on about how important it was to do homework and read the books that were assigned. I could feel myself nodding off already. I decided to take Johnny's advice and stare at Emily. From my angle, I could see her eyes were intently focused upon Mrs. Tolaski. The stuffy room did not help my sleepiness. Five more minutes, please God, make time go faster... I woke with a start as the bell rang and everyone rose, anxious to leave. I gazed over at Emily's seat and saw her giggle at something that Mike had just said. I got out of my chair noisily, hoping to distract Emily from Mike and walked out of the room.

"So, you woke up after the bell rang and then saw them talking and laughing?" Marc confirmed for the fiftieth time as he grabbed the rebound of Johnny's shot and threw it back to him.
"Yeah, I can't believe she could possibly see something in that guy." I muttered angrily. "He's even got a girlfriend. Brittany…Lerner. Head cheerleader."
"Chill out, Chris. You're right. He does have a girlfriend. Do you really think he'll risk it with Brittany for a chance with Emily?" Johnny tried to reassure me.
"Have you seen Emily?" My cynicism quieted him. I did a crossover, pump-faked, and leaned back for the jumper. Nothing but net. The more I thought about Emily and Mike, the angrier I became.


Chapter II

The first week of school flew by and it was time for basketball tryouts. Emily and Mike really hit it off and rumors started to spread that that was why Mike and Brittany broke up, although they both denied it. I guess Brittany didn't want to hurt her reputation by admitting that another girl had stole her boyfriend and Mike didn't want Emily to think that he would just leave a girl for another, even though everyone else knew the truth.
Marc, Johnny, and I were warming up and stretching on one half of the court while the cheerleaders were having their tryouts on the other side. I could see Brittany, captain of the squad again this year, directing the newcomers (which included, of course, Emily).
Coach Walker whistled us into a huddle and started talking about how the tryouts worked. Every year, just to be fair, Coach had everyone try out, even the starters from last year. Mostly everyone knew though, that they would get chosen again for the team. The tryouts were just to recruit more reserve players, since we did not have a very talented bench and incase of possible injuries. For the starters last year (including Mike and me), it was a showdown to see who could play better and show off more. For the bench (including Marc and Johnny), it was an all-out brawl with the new guys who were trying out. This year there were a lot more guys who were battling for bench positions because of Mike. He had brought the team to the state championship, which we hadn't done in almost 12 years. We lost to the Trinity Tigers in a best of seven match-up. In game 7, we lost our center, Rick Somers, halfway through the first quarter and it went downhill from there. Despite a tremendous effort by Mike, who put up 42 points, we lost. Rick was still slightly injured but would start as center this season.
To warm up some more, Coach made us do lay-ups, a daily exercise in his practices. Next, were the wind sprints. Both Mike and I were pretty matched, with Marc and Johnny close behind.
"Come on, guys. Bring it in." Coach clapped his hands three times. I bent down, with my hands on my knees, panting hard. "My grandmother can run faster than you guys! You guys are gonna have to pick up the slack!" He cleared his throat. "Now, let's see how you do with some 4 on 4. Shall we, ladies?" Coach smiled peering around at the circle of sweaty guys.
"Coleman, Ruger, Morrison, and Somers will be the red team," Assistant Coach Black announced as we lined up on the left side of him. "Matthews, Picconi, Jamison, and Mahoney will be the blue team." Marc and his teammates stood on the right side of him. Mr. Black looked up from his clipboard and nodded at Coach Walker.
"Jamison, call it in the air." Coach tossed the coin high into the air and caught with a thud in his palm.
"Heads." Mike said decisively and glared at me.
"Tails." Coach extended his arm to let Mike see. Mike grinned. "They're gonna need all the help they can get. Let's go blue team!" Mike jogged away with the rest of his team trailing him.
"First team to 11 points wins the game. We'll have the rest of you guys do a 4 on 4 tomorrow and by that time Mr. Black and I will have made some cuts." Coach nodded at us and then at the blue team.
"On 3!" Johnny, Jess, Rick, and I put our hands into a pile. "1, 2, 3! Goooo Red team!" We broke the huddle.
The Blue team, headed by none other than, Mike, was already warming up and taking lay-ups. Coach blew the whistle two times in a quick succession, signaling for the start of the game. Johnny brought the ball up court and then passed it to me. Mike guarded me closely, trying to tap the ball from my hands. "Come on, Morrison. I've been waiting all summer for this."
Saying nothing, I faked to the left and then suddenly changed course to the right. It was too late for Mike. I was already a step ahead and drove in for the dunk. Cheers from the Bellevue Sparks came from the sidelines. I could especially hear Brittany's voice yelling, "Go Chris!"
"You got lucky that time. It won't happen it again." Mike smirked, not paying attention to Brittany's comment. He took the ball and dribbled aggressively, ramming his shoulder into my chest. No foul called by Coach. He did a quick spin and Johnny switched off of Parker to guard Mike who dished it to Parker behind-the-back. Parker then did the same spin move as Mike to get around Coleman and laid it in for one.
"You and Mike make a cute couple with all the moves you're copying off him." I yelled to Parker as he ran past me on his way up court. Johnny and me snickered. Parker just ignored us.
The game continued that way for a while, both teams trading points, with Mike pretty much dominating for the blue team. Marc wasn't getting any touches with Parker and Mike on the team. Johnny and me were picking up the slack on our end, since Somers was still injured and Coleman wasn't much of a player. Coach blew his whistle and announced the score: 9-10, in favor of the blue team.
"We can win this one, guys. On 3." I put my hand out and looked at Johnny, who nodded. "1, 2, 3! Win!" I saw that Mike had been watching our huddle. He sneered at me and then turned back to his team as Coach's whistle told us to get back onto the court. Coleman cautiously dribbled to half court and then quickly made a pass to Johnny. He threw the rock to Somers, who towered over the shorter Matthews. Mike quickly raced over to help Matthews. Somers saw him coming and passed it over Mike's head to me. I caught it and jumped at the same time. I let it go and heard the swish as I saw Mike's unbelieving face.
"Yeah!" Johnny cried and raced over to jump on me. "Awesome shot, dude."
The blue team regrouped and took the offense. Marc stared at me and gave me a grim smile. Coach informed us now that we had to win by two points - a deuce.
"I'm gonna end this here and now." Mike did not give me a smirk this time. He did a couple of crossovers and looked straight into my eyes.
"Bring it." I hunched down, ready for anything Mike was about to pull.
Mike drove swiftly to his left, unusually, and then suddenly stopped. He heaved it over to the other side of the court to Parker. I turned to see Johnny leaning in on Parker, who did not dribble. Mike bolted to the middle of the court at the three-point line. I reacted quickly, on his tail. As he received the pass from Parker, he started to jump. I leaped, knowing that he would make the shot if I did not foul him. Mike yelled out as I hit him on his forearm. "What the hell, man? You didn't have to hit me that hard!" His shot bounced off the rim as Coach called a foul. I gave him a look and walked to the line in between Parker and Marc.
"Two shots, Jamison, to put it away. Good foul, Morrison." Coach handed Mike the ball and clapped his hands together again.
Mike stepped to the charity stripe and wiped the sweat from his brow. He raised his arms in the movements of his shot. He bounced the ball twice, squatted, and released the ball. It sailed through the air and touched nothing but net. The blue team, except Marc, shouted in encouragement and high-fives went around. Mike dribbled twice again. He seemed calmer now that he had sunk the first shot. I heard the swish and looked down. The blue team surrounded their hero.
"Alright, gather around everyone. That was a very intense game and very well played by both teams. Report back to the gym tomorrow at 3:00. Hit the showers, you guys smell like pigs." Coach gathered his clipboard and walked off in the direction of his office. "Jamison, I need to see you." Mike followed him to his small, beat-down office.
After showering, Johnny, Marc, and I headed to Robert's Eatery for something to eat.
"Jamison and Parker would rather turn the ball over then pass to me! I didn't score any points. Now, I'm screwed." Marc was still fuming over the game.
"You're team won, that's gotta count for something." Johnny tried to cheer him up.
"Yeah, all thanks to Jamison, the star." Marc looked at me dismally.
"Look, Marc. You're gonna make the team. You averaged 10 points, 6 rebounds last season, which is very impressive. You were on the team before last season. You were there working your ass off way before the championship run. Coach will remember that." I tried to reassure him.
"Easy for you to say, you were the star of the team before Jamison came. You still are a big part of the team," Marc said bitterly. "Just forget it. Whatever." He pushed his plate away and stood up. "I gotta go. Later."
"Later, man." Johnny bid him goodbye. "Geez, I wonder what got into him," Johnny speculated as Marc left. He took a huge bite of his meatball sub.
"I don't know. I gotta get going too - homework." Johnny nodded and grabbed his coat. We headed for the door when it was opened by Emily Vicardo followed by Mike Jamison.
"Well, well, well. If it isn't Morrison and Ruger." Mike had a big smile on his face. "Good game today, huh Chris? Ruger." He tilted his head up slightly in recognition of Johnny and then turned back to me.
"Yeah, nice free throws. Been practicing I can tell." I stole a glance over at Emily. She looked adorable. "Aren't you gonna introduce us, Mike?" I motioned toward Emily, even though Johnny and I both already knew who she was.
"Oh, yeah, right. This is Emily Vicardo, my girlfriend. She's new to Bellevue High." I shook her hand, as did Johnny. "Emily, this is Chris Morrison and Johnny Ruger."
"Nice to meet you, Emily." I gave her a slight smile and Johnny nodded at her.
"So, what did Coach want, Jamison?" Johnny asked. I continued to stare at Emily.
"Oh, yeah. He just wanted to tell me that some college scouts, old friends of his, were coming to check me out," he responded and grinned at Johnny maliciously.
"That's great for you." Johnny said a bit caustically.
"We gotta get going, Jamison. See ya at tryouts. Emily." Johnny and I walked in silence to the train station.
"Can you believe it?" Johnny spoke up after a few minutes. "He's so cocky and arrogant."
"Yeah, well, that's Mike for ya." I waited for the train is consternation.




















Chapter III

"We've decided on a 12-man roster this season. In the event of an injury, we will add more players. Today, the 4 on 4 will be between: Daniels, Pells, Riviera, and Johnson, the red team. The blue team will consist of: Walters, Bruvero, Simmons, and Edwards. I will post who has made the team outside my office at the end of the game. Coach Black and I would like to thank everyone for coming out and trying. Let's get this game started." Coach Walker sat down on the bleachers next to Mr. Black.
The game continued for what seemed like hours. Halfway through watching the most-likely-to-be bench players, Johnny nudged me. "Look who's coming over here," he whispered as he stared at Brittany Lerner. I saw Mike look intently at her also for a second.
"Hey, Chris. Can I talk to you alone for a second?" she asked a little shyly. I looked over at Mike, who had a confused look on his face, and then back at Brittany.
"Sure," I said and jerked my head over to the top of the bleachers where no one was sitting.
"So, you know about the dance coming up tomorrow right?" I nodded. "I was wondering if you had a date yet?" Her bright, blue eyes were piercing into mine, questioning.
"Actually, I don't." I licked my lips and tried to make sense of her face. "Good…cause you're going with me," she said as more of a command than a request. I smiled. "Pick you up at 7:00?"
"It's a date then. I'll call you." She leaned over and gave me a hug, wrapping her arms tightly around my neck, and then kissed me on the cheek. She bounded down the bleachers and then continued to walk right past Mike and Parker to the sidelines with Emily and the other cheerleaders. I hopped down the steps two at a time to where Johnny and Marc were sitting.
"What did ?'perky' want and what was she doing hugging and kissing you?" Johnny asked in a disgusted tone.
"She wanted to ask me out to the dance tomorrow," I said matter-of-factly. I checked their faces - filled with shock.
"What?! And you said…?" Johnny's face was replete with surprise and anticipation.
"Yes...Why wouldn't I?" I asked, a bit baffled.
"She was Mike Jamison's ex-girlfriend, for crying out loud. He's gonna kill you when he finds out!" Marc explained to me slowly as if I was too dumb to understand.
"What? No…wait a minute. Ex-girlfriend is right. He's over her and has moved on." I argued. "Never mind, look who's coming over now." I twitched my head towards Parker who was walking over casually with a little swagger.
"Yo, Morrison! What did Blondie want with you?" Parker spat out.
"What? Did Jamison send you?" I asked, diverting the question.
"Yeah. So what if he did?" Parker replied blatantly.
"If Jamison wants to talk with me, tell him to come over and do it himself," I answered coolly. Coach's whistle broke up our conversation. Apparently, the red team (Daniels, Pells, Riviera, and Johnson) had won.
"The guys that just played hit the showers. The guys who didn't, wait in the locker room," Coach ordered us. He then proceeded to his office again, with Mr. Black trailing. I pushed past Parker and went into the locker room. Mike and Parker came in afterwards. I could hear the cheerleaders file into the girls' locker room next door. Johnny and Marc were tense and didn't say anything because it was likely that one of them could get cut from the team, since so many guys had tried out. Usually, there were only 1 or 2 new guys that had to be cut from the team. The guys were finished showering and put on clean clothes. Mr. Black opened the door with a thud. "List is posted." He smacked his bubblegum. Marc and Johnny rushed to see if they had made the team, while Mike and Parker stayed behind. I followed Marc and Johnny outside to Coach's office. The list posted said in Coach's impeccable handwriting:

Boys' Varsity Basketball Team

Michael Jamison
Christopher Morrison
Rick Somers
Parker Mahoney
Johnny Ruger
Marc Picconi
James Riviera
Jack Simmons
Rob Edwards
Desmond Walters
Adrian Johnson
Alexander Daniels

"Alright! I told you you'd make it, Marc," cheered Johnny. I patted him on the back.
"People who have made the team will meet back in the gym Monday for practice at 3:00," Coach's voice boomed through the hallway. "The rest of you guys, thanks for coming." Coach then went into his office and closed the door behind him.
"There you are, Mike." I turned and saw Emily Vicardo in her stunning cheerleading outfit wrap her arms around Mike. Mike gave her a little kiss on the lips and then closed his arms around her waist.
"Did you make the team?" Emily questioned, even though I was pretty sure she already knew the answer.
"Of course, baby." He looked a bit offended.
"Congratulations!" Another kiss. I was feeling sick to my stomach, so I looked away.
They walked off together. "So, Morrison," Parker said as soon as Mike and Emily were out of earshot. "You gonna tell me what's going on with you and Brittany or am I gonna have to beat it out of ya?" He looked pretty serious, but I wasn't taunted.
"You'll see, Parker, in due time. Why does Mike care that much anyways?" I retorted and ambled off after Johnny and Marc who had left already.

"So, tell me you made the team, superstar." Mom smiled after taking a bite of lasagna.
I tried to act forlorn as if I hadn't, but I couldn't help but smile after a second. "I made the team, so did Johnny and Marc."
"I bet Michael Jamison did too. He's only like the best player ever," my vexing, little brother piped up.
"Yeah." I played with the lasagna on my plate. "He did. Hey, Mom, can I borrow the car Friday night?"
"Oh, sure, I guess. What do you need it for?" Mom inquired. I knew it was coming, but I still didn't want to explain to her about going out with Mike Jamison's ex, when Matt thought he was the greatest basketball player ever.
"I'm going to a school dance with this girl. I'm picking her up at her house." I looked down and played with my lasagna some more.
"Oh. That's nice. Do I know the girl?" Mom prodded ingenuously.
I sighed softly. "Her name's Brittany Lerner. She's captain of the cheerleading squad."
"Wait a minute. Brittany Lerner?" Matt asked as if the name was familiar to him.
I stared at him, puzzled, since he was only in the 6th grade. "Yeah. Why?"
"Wow, you're going out with Mike Jamison's ex-girlfriend?" Astonishment filled his face.
"Yeah, so what?"
"Well…" he started to say but was truncated by my glare.
"What are you? Some sort of Michael Jamison groupie?" I wasn't so much upset that he knew so much about Mike's life; but that he acted as if he didn't even care I was on the basketball team or anything related to me. I mean, after all, I was his big brother.
"No, I just follow high school basketball closely. That's all." He appeared to be sorry and scared at the same time.
"Whatever. I'm done, Mom. Thanks. Excuse me." I pushed the chair from the table and climbed the stairs to my bedroom.
I flopped out to my bed and checked the clock on the nightstand: 6:41. I wasn't in the mood for homework. While contemplating whether or not to call Johnny or Marc, the phone rang and I picked it up.
"Hello?" I ran my hand through my dirty blond hair, suddenly feeling exhausted.
I heard a soft, feminine voice and I immediately thought of Emily. Then, realizing that Emily had never even talked to me, I felt stupid. "Hi, this is Brittany. Is Chris there?"
"Hey, Brittany. What's up?" I said.
"Hey, I just wanted to talk about the dance. It starts at seven 'o clock. So, I thought you could pick me up at around 6 so we could get something to eat and then arrive fashionably late? Does that sound alright to you?" Brittany said this in a very quick, jumbled manner.
"Yeah, sure, sounds great. Give me your address and number. Let me get a pen." I searched my bag for one and got a piece of notebook paper also. "Go ahead."
"1782 Riverdale St. My number's 827-9561. Okay, gotta go, Chris. See you tomorrow." Click. She did not wait for me to say anything.
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amateur writer
 
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Reply Wed 18 Aug, 2004 05:43 pm
hey everyone

since no one has replied.. i don't think that i'll continue the story.. i'll leave it
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Reply Thu 19 Aug, 2004 06:14 pm
Hi. Welcome to a2k if your still around. I would suggest posting a small amount at a time. I personally didn't read it, it's just way too much at one time.
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Reply Thu 19 Aug, 2004 08:35 pm
okay..will do next time .. thanks for the welcome
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mchol
 
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Reply Mon 23 Aug, 2004 08:28 am
Whoo... I just finished reading all that. It's pretty good if the audience you're trying to target are 12-15 year olds. It does kind of start off slow, but it's alright. And like SUFP said, I would post like 1 chapter at a time so we readers don't get overwhelmed. Keep going at it! Good luck!
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Reply Mon 23 Aug, 2004 08:31 am
thanks for taking the time to read it...yes i admit it does start off a bit slow...next i'll post one chapter at a time

would you be interested in reading more then?
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mchol
 
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Reply Mon 23 Aug, 2004 08:33 am
You're very welcome! And yes, I wouldn't mind reading more. 1 chaprter at a time though. But tell me, what IS your target audience??
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Reply Mon 23 Aug, 2004 09:11 am
okay great..my target audience is teenagers from 12 + like you said

here is the next chapter:

Chapter IV

I looked at myself in the mirror. I felt a little apprehensive, yet excited to show up with Brittany, Mike's ex. She was sure to make a big show in front of him. I checked my watch: 5:47. I raced down the steps and grabbed the car keys and flowers, I had picked up early, from the counter.
"I'm leaving now." I yelled up the stairs while putting on my jacket and making sure I had enough money.
"OK, honey. Have a good time." Mom shouted back. "Don't stay out past 12," she reminded me again.
"I won't. Bye."
On the way over there, I thought about Johnny and Marc. Johnny was still a little shocked about the whole thing. He was going solo with some guys from the team and Marc had Vanessa. I pulled up to 1782 Riverdale St. It was a three-story old Victorian house. I ran up the three steps to the door. I rang the doorbell and heard the shuffling of feet and a dog bark.
The door was opened by, what I assumed was, Brittany's mother. "Why hello, you must be Brittany's date." She looked just like Brittany, except older with more wrinkles. There was no sign of the dog downstairs.
"Yes, I am, Mrs. Lerner. My name's Chris."
"Come in. Come in. This is Ryan, my husband." She gestured toward a plump man sitting on a beige couch reading a newspaper. He stood up and greeted me. "Hello there. Sit down." I sat down. "I hear you play basketball for the Bulldogs."
"Yes, I do." At that moment Brittany emerged from the kitchen in a hot pink miniskirt and white jean jacket.
I stood up, a little taken aback. "Hey, Brittany. You look nice."
"Thanks. We should get going. Bye Mom. Dad." She kissed her dad on the cheek and took my hand. "Good night Mr. and Mrs. Lerner." I waved to them. When we got into the car, I said, "Here, I got some flowers for you." I handed them to her and she smelled them.
"Thanks. How'd you know daffodils were my favorite?" She placed them on the dashboard. "Oh, I didn't - coincidence." She smiled and so did I.
"So, where do you want to eat?"
"How about Robert's Eatery?" I backed the car out of the driveway.
"Sure, sounds good. Oh my god. I love this song." She reached over and turned up the volume. "We were both 16 and it felt so right…"
"You like Yellowcard too?" I was surprised.
"Are you kidding? Yes! Do you like Hoobastank?" she asked. "The Reason?"
"Yeah, that's only like the greatest song there is." We laughed. We sat in silence the rest of the way there, listening to "Ocean Avenue". It was a short drive to Robert's.
"Hi. How can I help you?" Robert Jr. asked.
"Hey, Rob, can I get two hamburgers and two cokes for here? Is that okay with you, Brittany?" She nodded. We took a booth near the window (the waiter would bring our food over).
"So, I guess you made the team?" She looked at me a little bleakly. I guess she was reminded of Mike.
"Yeah, I did. So did Mike." I watched her face change from sadness to anger.
"Why are you bringing up that loser?" She seemed pissed off.
"No reason in particular." Another pause. "So…why'd you guys even break up in the first place?" I urged gently.
"Could we just not talk about the jerk?" The waiter brought over our meal.
"Yeah, sure. But I thought you dumped him." I still wanted to know what had happened with them. She took a sip of her Coke.
"I did." After a reluctant silence, she continued, "I caught him with that tramp, Emily." She looked shameful. I nodded as if to say go on. "I saw him with her after school one day. They were holding hands and kissing. That night I called him up and dumped him over the phone." I saw a tear trickle down her face.
"I'm real sorry, Brittany. Yeah, Mike can be a real jerk sometimes."
She wiped away the tear. "The biggest. He was always so jealous of your basketball talents. I think he was afraid of you stealing his star role on the team."
I fixed my eyes on at my plate. "Wow…I always assumed that he thought I sucked."
"Despite that, we had a real connection, or at least I thought we did."
"I didn't know you cared about him that much." I could tell that she was totally not over Mike, although I could not see why she could be attracted to him. She could do so much better.

The dance wasn't in full swing yet when Brittany and I arrived. I spotted Johnny with James, Alex, and Desmond over at the punch table. I waved to them. "Come on, let's go see Johnny and the guys from the team." She followed, holding my hand.
"Hey guys! What's up? Johnny." I nodded at him. He looked away and downed his drink.
"Excuse me, I'm going to the bathroom." He pushed past me and headed to the restroom.
"You wanna dance?" Brittany smiled and took my hand, leading me out to the center of the gym. Mike seemed to be forgotten completely.
"Uh…just to warn you, you might wanna watch your feet, or I'll step all over them." She laughed. "Hey, I warned you." I held her close to me. Only about a minute into the dance, I felt someone bump into me.
"Oh…Sor--" I turned to see Emily in Mike's arms. I felt my stomach lurch.
"Well, well, well, if it isn't Chris Morrison and Brittany Lerner," he laughed out loud.
"Hello Emily. Mike." Brittany pulled at my arm. "Let's get out of here, Chris." I turned to go.
"Whoa, whoa, whoa." Apparently he liked to say a word three times. "Where you guys going? The dance just started." He grinned.
"Yeah, I…just don't feel like hanging around my ex the first dance of the year."
Mike had a look of horror on his face. His brown eyes penetrated into Brittany's and they were locked for a second.
Emily was taken by surprise. "I didn't know that you two dated. When did that happen, Mike?" Mike started to say something, but was cut of by Brittany.
"You know, I guess I didn't tell you, Emily, because you seemed so genuine. Mike and me dated for over a year and we just broke up when school started and you came. When I caught him making out with you, I dumped him." Emily glared at Mike who shook his head and rubbed his forehead. He started to smile.
"Is she telling the truth?" Emily voice started to crack. Mike looked away.
"No, baby. She's lying. Tell her, Chris." He punched my arm lightly. I don't know why he thought I'd lie for him, since we'd never been friends.
"I don't know what's been going on between these two," I lied, not wanting to get entangled into this mess.
"Fine, don't believe me, Emily, but remember this." She quickly stepped forward, put her hand behind Mike's neck to pull him forward and kissed him. Gasps came from around the room.
Emily watched in disbelief, hiked her dress up and hurried out of the gym. "Emily! Wait! What the hell are you doing?" He looked at Brittany with repugnance and shook his head, appalled. He bolted outside after Emily. "Emily!"
There were a couple of moments of silence as people stared in shock at Brittany and me.
"Do you wanna go home?" I touched her shoulder. She nodded and quickly headed for the door also. I followed her, with my head down to avoid the embarrassing stares. I pulled up in front of her house and made for the door.
"No, Chris. You don't have to walk me to the door." She sniffled.
"But I want--" I started, but she interrupted.
"Please, you've already done enough. Thanks. See you around." She opened the door and slammed it shut. I watched as she disappeared into the darkness until her figure was lost into the house.
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mchol
 
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Reply Mon 23 Aug, 2004 09:41 am
Hey getting better. Wink
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amateur writer
 
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Reply Mon 23 Aug, 2004 11:20 am
thanks! any critique is appreciated...will post the next chapter as soon as i can
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Reply Mon 23 Aug, 2004 04:21 pm
here's the next chapter:

I didn't feel like going back home yet at 8:13. I decided to drive back to the gym and hang out with Johnny. I couldn't find him anywhere inside and I was getting uncomfortable with the gazes. Figuring that he had already left, I went back outside when I heard Johnny call my name.
"Chris! My main man! What the hell you doing here? I thought you left with Brittany." He sounded drunk.
"Johnny, your breath stinks of alcohol, man. Have you been drinking?" I was worried, because Johnny never drank. Marc and I did not drink either. I vowed never to drink after my father got drunk and drove into a tree, killing himself when I was only seven. "Let's get you home, buddy."
"No, get off me. I'm fine." He had an evil grin on his face. He patted me on the back and tried to walk away. I ran to catch him right before he fell and carried him into the car. Not knowing what to do, I left the car door open incase he had to throw up. "Johnny, if you need to puke, just do it on the ground, not in the car," I reminded him. I called Marc's cell and he picked up.
"Hey, Chris. I heard about what happened with Brittany and Mike. That must've--" I cut him short. "Yeah, yeah. Listen, I need your help. Where are you?"
"I'm at the dance with Vanessa. Where are you?" I could hear the concern in his voice.
"Outside in the parking lot with Johnny. He's drunk." I quickly explained the situation.
"I'm coming right now." He hung up and I checked on Johnny.
I looked over the school doors and saw Marc and Vanessa appear. "Marc!" I shouted to him and waved him over.
"Where'd you get the beer, Johnny?" Marc was trying to question him.
"A couple of guys gave it to me," Johnny groaned.
"Who? Which guys?" I asked him. I was extremely angry that they had given it to him, but at the same time wondering why he had taken it.
"Jaysters. Ahh. Parker and his idiot friends." Johnny finally got out. Once I heard Parker, I erupted.
"Come on, Marc. We got some people to find. Vanessa, can you stay here with Johnny?" She nodded.
Marc and I first searched the outside premises of the school grounds. We couldn't find them there, so we decided to check the gym. I immediately spotted Parker dancing with his girlfriend, Jamie.
"Hey, Parker!" Marc yelled across the dance floor to him. " I need to talk to you." Marc had a deadly look in his eyes. Parker stopped dancing with Jamie. He said something to her and then walked over to us, while checking to see if there were any teachers around. There weren't.
"What can I do for you, Marc?" He crossed his arms across his chest and looked smug.
"What did you give Johnny?" Parker was quiet. "I said, what did you give Johnny?" Marc said each word slowly, trying to keep his temper.
"What do you mean?" Parker played dumb.
"Let me rephrase. Did you or did you not give Johnny beer?"
"Johnny Ruger?"
"Don't play games with me, Parker."
"No, I didn't." He shook his head. "We were talking and he drank some punch, but that's it." He smiled and started to walk back to Jamie. Marc grabbed his shoulder, turned him around, and landed his fist right on Parker's nose. I quickly pulled Marc back as Parker fell to the floor. It was too late. Coach Walker had just come out of the restroom and saw the punch.
"What the hell is going on here?" He yelled at both Parker and Marc.
Parker recovered from the blow and stood up. He pinched his nose, which was bleeding. "Marc, here, just punched me in the nose," Parker answered truthfully.
"Is this true, Marc?" Coach looked at him unbelievingly.
"Yes, sir," Marc said softly.
"I'm gonna have to take care you of two boys personally Monday afternoon after practice. Now, get out of here, both of you." Coach's voice was calm, but firm.
We left quickly and headed to my car. "What took you guys so long? Johnny threw up twice." Vanessa look grossed out and worried at the same time.
"Marc picked a fight with Parker," I explained. Johnny moaned and sat up.
"What happened?" he questioned. He opened his eyes and fixed them upon Marc's face.
Marc sighed. "I punched him in the nose, when he wouldn't admit to giving you the beer. Coach stopped the fight and said he was going to take care of us personally after practice Monday."
"Aw, crap Marc. Why'd you have to go and punch Parker? I have to tell Coach it was all my fault."
"No, Johnny. You could get suspended, even expelled for underage drinking on school grounds." Marc's expression was serious. "Plus, Coach's a good guy. He probably won't suspend me. But, why'd you take the beer from Parker in the first place?"
"I didn't know it was beer. He was taunting me saying that I wasn't good enough to make the team and stuff. He challenged me to a chugging contest. You know, I couldn't say no. So, I won the first match, lost the second, and won the third. Best of 3. Parker took the losses surprisingly well and left with some other Jaysters." There was a silence.
"Johnny, do you think you'll be able to make it home without your parents busting you?" I inquired.
"They're out of town for the weekend. I guess I'm lucky." Johnny sighed. I assumed he was frustrated about being tricked by Parker.
"You guys can go. I'll take care of Johnny." I told Marc and Vanessa. They nodded and left.
"So, Johnny." He nodded to show he was listening. "I'll take you back to your house and stay with you until around 11:30. OK?" He nodded again.
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