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Tue 3 Aug, 2004 05:50 pm
I feel like I walked up to a stranger and said hi,
but you are no stranger, you were the apple of my eye.
We used to be in love a third of a decade ago.
As I look at you now, what did I feel? I hardly know.
You are not the one I held gently through the night.
You are not the one who made me feel so right.
That ring on your finger did not come from me.
That smile on your face says it's meant to be.
I'm glad you moved on, cause so have I,
I just saw you walking, so I thought i'd say hi.
(I see it. Through "At a glance", btw.)
You've got a knack for creating unforced rhymes. A bit heavier on cliches than your usual, but still captures a moment nicely.
I liked it. It had a really good flow to it.
sozobe wrote:(I see it. Through "At a glance", btw.)
You've got a knack for creating unforced rhymes. A bit heavier on cliches than your usual, but still captures a moment nicely.
Very true sozobe, that was kinda the point. It was cheesy, so cheesy that it came together. I've just been trying to experiment somewhat lately. BTW, I didn't know you read my stuff, thanks!
Also thanks to you DC, haven't seen you around in awhile!
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