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Mon 26 Jul, 2004 09:58 pm
Do I miss you?
I have to miss you.
Because if you love someone
and they're gone,
thats what you feel.
I don't, but I want to.
What does that make me.
I want to love you,
but I can't.
Why?
Why can't you be the one?
You're so good to me,
and you love me.
When am I gonna accept
that I can't learn to love you?
How can I just let you go?
This is so messed up.
How can this happen?
I want to love you.
I want to love you.
Very strong, SUFP
Makes me want to say, "hey, Love him but go somewhere else."
Just thought I would add a couple of suggestions to clean up some word usage problems.
Line 4: "and their gone" should be "and they're gone" to be grammatically correct.
Line 14: "When am I gonna except" should be When am I gonna accept" to mean what I think you want it to mean.
Hope you don't take my suggestions personally, I just hate seeing decent writing messed up by grammatical errors.
Thanks tol! You give some good advise.
Coast- Thanks for pointing those errors out me! Anytime you see anything, I'd love for you or anyone to say what it is, not only does it make the writing better, but it helps me learn and remember for next time!
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