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A question for native English speakers: Is this paragraph needlessly wordy and sloppy?

 
 
Reply Sat 19 Sep, 2015 02:30 am
The collapse of the Soviet Union gave birth to a unipolar world under the hegemonic influence of the United States. This radical change had many implications. For one, the economically crippling arms race and the resulting security dilemma between the two competing powers ceased.
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Reply Sat 19 Sep, 2015 11:14 am
@tamara123454,
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two competing powers ceased
Bothers me for some reason, Tam

Maybe s/b "had ceased," "finally ceased,"or something like that. Help all you language experts
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