Sorry

I liked it, Pessimism. It seemed heartfelt, and warm despite to what it's referring.

I almost feel I'm intruding into something very personal.

Extremely powerful poem, SUFP.

I really like this, it gave me great inspiration...
Can I borrow your first verse, and jiggle with it? I'll show it here before I post it elswhere. Please?

It just says a lot of what I feel-- but I would jiggle the lyrics, as Polarbear said.
I guess it proves the power of inspiring, huh?
I always read your writing. Keep it up, please.

aww.....thanks everyone, theo, you made my day. And yes, anyone who wants to "jiggle" as you call it, feel free. I'm interested in what you come up with!

This is what came to my head as soon as I read yours. Thanks for letting me use your material!

Look into my eyes, do I look alive?
I pretend you don't hear me cry.
I share the bed, but you sleep alone.
You kiss my face, I turn, I've flown.
You touched my heart, found it cold.
You feel confused, I feel controlled.
You ly close, but minds do stray,
and I sense your love ebbing away.
Painful, but easier like this
than if you find my love exists.

Look into my eyes, do I look alive?
You can't tell me you can't hear my cries.
You share my bed, from far, far away.
You touch my face, I turn, you gouge.
I'm sorry I don't want you, and that I led you on.
I thought you could learn to love me, I was wrong.
Time does not heal the present, but it will heal the past.
I'm sorry I hurt you, sorry but lust don't last.

(thanx for permission, Stand Up- I just stated it to fit me- I still like yours best. It feels good to get it out of my system).

Re: Sorry


Look into my eyes,
do I look alive?
Don't tell me you can't hear
my cries.
We share a bed,
but both of us
sleep alone.
You kiss my face, I turn,
you groan like an animal cornered.
I'm sorry I don't 'feel you',
I'm sorry if I 'led you on'.
I thought I could learn to love you,
I suppose I was wrong.
Time won't change the past,
but it will heal the future.
I'm sorry it didn't last,
I'm sorry I hurt you,
I'm sorry this makes me
feel so sorry.

I did the same as ToL, tailored it to my experiences. Thanks for the permission!

This is great! Good goin' everyone!

Pessimism...I really liked this poem. So far of all yours I've read TODAY(lol). It reminds me of this guy I just broke up with, well the situation in the poem reminds me of our situation. Again, a very realistic, very relatable poem. I liked it alot.